14 Stories Up

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READ THIS FAST. read it continued and fast and all in one breath. read it how i read it in my head and to myself, and it will sound amazing. read it like a different poem, it will sound like crap. your choice.

14 Stories Up

Standing on the very edge of a 14 story
building and the gun's sitting heavy in his
fist and a blue Pontiac is screaming past
on the street underhead and the doomed ring
of ambulances and cop cars and church bells chiming
'cause it's a Sunday, and mass has
just let out and the moment of
strung out immortality hangs suspended in the air
on a string like a brick of words hard to swallow
and it falls from a readily open mouth and
he lets go and I swear to god;
I thought he would fly.  

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sk8erpoet commented on 14 Stories Up

03-09-2011

i love this poem..its amazing... I love all the thoughts in it...great write..sk8

brokenhearted11

03/09/2011

thank you!!

angelchaser commented on 14 Stories Up

02-05-2011

Read it fast, read it slow, loved it both ways. Your descriptive nature is something to treasure, sweetpea:)

brokenhearted11

02/05/2011

haha thanks. its like... all one breath, connected, strange. but i liked it. different than anything ive written before, but fun.

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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