As Dusk Became Dawn

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    Love, sweet innocent surrender and caress lingers on......

    As Dusk Became Dawn

    As Dusk Became Dawn

    Fireflies danced, moonlight dripped

    Over shiny, young silhouettes

    In a courtyard of fawn lilies

    Love spawned and reigned

     

    Crooning psalms of power and grace

    Cool was the night but warm was the touch

    Deep eyes gazed so much

    Drinking in lovely notes, like champagne

     

    More was the kiss, feelings of bliss

    Swells inside, absence of pride

    Weeping and sleeping in that place

    Kissing each others face

    By drunken love embraced

     

    One night only, was known

    A timeless eternity of love was shown

    Loves sweet innocent surrender and caress lingers on.....

     

    -M. Jacobs 

     

     

     

     

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    SavVySam commented on As Dusk Became Dawn

    04-22-2010

    Loving moments described in such eloquent and tender terms leave long lasting impressions that are so deeply etched they become part of our collective soul. Beautiful!

    danmartyjake1

    04/22/2010

    What a beautiful compliment! Thanks ever so much for reading " As Dusk Became Dawn".

    trocka7 commented on As Dusk Became Dawn

    09-15-2009

    Ahh, this made me want to close my eyes and feel the atmosphere that you created all around me...such beautiful imagery and a sweet tenderness in each line. "Drinking in lovely notes, like champagne" is just gorgeous to me...thanks for sharing this, I'm putting it into my faves :)

    danmartyjake1

    09/15/2009

    Thank You, I am pleased you enjoyed it.

    Grito commented on As Dusk Became Dawn

    09-14-2009

    We may live life in those moments that define what life is.

    danmartyjake1

    09/15/2009

    Yes, indeed and still luive and love within them from time to time, just as memories. Thanks

    soulwriter commented on As Dusk Became Dawn

    09-13-2009

    This piece begins perfectly with vivid prose then transends into meaningful rhyme upon rhyme, the timing plays dusk to dawn with well delivered passion.

    danmartyjake1

    09/14/2009

    Thank you, soul, for that supportive comment. It feels good to know that other's felt my message.

    LenaMP commented on As Dusk Became Dawn

    09-13-2009

    Vivid imagery, a mixture of natures beauty and natural instincts of passion. Innocence lost in the shelter of a moment. Nicely written.

    danmartyjake1

    09/13/2009

    Thanks Lena. I have enjoyed many of yours, as well.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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