Asylum

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    • christianprep
    • done with my study it was hard now my poem is published its called Prayer Study and Poem

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    In memmory of the grandmother i never new. she was insane let me know if u like it and how u took its meaning from the beging an the end,,, don't forget to rate please

    Asylum

    Read closely for it unfolds

    the dark rooms Lies,

    A body twitching and still

    Is she dead,

    No one knows

    for fear of Insanity grows

    Its like a disease to the brain

    until the body awakens,

    and out she goes,

    Her Insanity grows darker

    time comes to a close,

    People want to escape fast

    as terror unfolds

    as her life less body walks the halls

    insanely people scream, as they recite doom

    because for ever more, Insanity grows

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    brokenhearted11 commented on Asylum

    12-12-2010

    i like this one, it reminds me a bit of one of my own. i really like the rhyme pattern, it sounds really rhythmic and nice. great job here, keep writing!!!
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    christianprep

    01/12/2011

    thank you; its one that i tryed to make as a dark poem... that had nothing to do with what i like writing about i wrote it to be fun and i wanted to write using the word Asylum because the word hardly gets said anymore

    mustascheman commented on Asylum

    11-22-2010

    Okay...that's a little better. Almost more my taste but then again my taste is for blood and real darkness with shrouds of evil ever encircling.......
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    christianprep

    11/22/2010

    I can't really do all that yet.. More inspired by God to write.. I have more passion that way... but i am trying to get to were i can write dark poems

    winterkou commented on Asylum

    11-12-2010

    I like the dark feel this one has your writing has really improved.
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    christianprep

    11/14/2010

    Something I am working on.... this one took me a long time to write, and it was not all that heart felt of a poem

    Artie commented on Asylum

    11-12-2010

    I like the suspenseful and dark feeling of this. Nice job - 10
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    christianprep

    11/14/2010

    ha ha ha thanks......lol have not talked to u in awhile u i know were on here when i first started original poetry

    Mrpoetry commented on Asylum

    11-10-2010

    sounds like she awoke in the horrors of hell, which by the way is no joke. good poem. that is why i write the way i do.
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    christianprep

    11/10/2010

    okay.. thanks.....

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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