Beautiful Death

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    Beautiful Death

     I am a dog
    Full of loyalty
    Lying at your feet
    Every night
    Depending on you
    Everything you do
    Every scrap you throw my way

    I love you!
    But I hate you!
    I want you!
    But can't stand you!
    You are the air I breath
    And the poison that I drink
    Tell me why should I succumb
    To such a beautiful death?

    I am a whore
    Full of lust
    Lying naked
    In your bed
    Every night
    Just another warm body
    For you to hide inside

    I love you!
    But I hate you!
    I want you!
    But can't stand you!
    You are the air I breath
    And the poison that I drink
    Tell me why should I succumb
    To such a beautiful death?

    I am your waste
    I am your pawn
    I am the devil
    That you spawned
    I am the truth
    I am the lie
    I am each tear
    You make me cry!
    I am what I've become
    What I became
    Since you came along

    I love you!
    But I hate you!
    I want you!
    But can't stand you!
    You are the air I breath
    And the poison that I drink
    Tell me why should I succumb
    To such a beautiful death?

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    KristyLoren commented on Beautiful Death

    08-27-2009

    I enjoyed your lyrics, although I became confused about 25% into it. I didn't really connect with it, but was does that mean, it's YOUR wonderful writing. There are many GREAT lines in it. And again there is something great in it, I just didn't connect. But over all it was interesting :)
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    NJay commented on Beautiful Death

    07-20-2009

    Nice poem. It seems you are caught between the inevitable. Death call we must obey yet we hate it and love it again. Ride on.
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    RHPeat commented on Beautiful Death

    07-15-2009

    I think the poem is complete after the second stanza. The dog image says it all. The rest of the poem moves away from the dog metaphor and doesn't real offer anything new to the intent in the poem While the last like in stanza two looks like closure on the poem. Cut the dead wood. A poet friend// RH Peat
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    laydbak1 commented on Beautiful Death

    06-27-2009

    Ah, the ages old story of the love-hate diorama... Life all wrapped up into one big pile of uncertain feelings, passions, and blissfully ignorant agony of self-being... You told the story well... I couldn't pull this one off, but you did it with ease... Great write...
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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