Cave

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    Cave

    Cave

     

    I visit you in your cave.

    It is a lovely cave

    But it is still a cave.

     

    I want to be in nature

    Where the birds sing the songs I long to hear

     

    I want to wash my face with the wind

    And excite every neuron with the icy flow of pure streams

     

    I long to breath clean air untainted by re-circulation

    And I hope to feel the mud squish between my toes

     

    I don’t wish to live in a cave

    But, alas I do for pay

    Do you still want to wallow?

     

    It is a lovely cave

    But it is still a cave.

     

    So, take me on a journey

    Where the only sounds are silence

    And time is forever

     

    Hurry now, time’s a-wastin’

    And my senses are dulled daily

     

    Tell me the words I long to hear

    And breathe a new life to my heart

     

    Shock my system with renewal

    Purge me of my old ways

     

    Show me the obstacles I have constructed

    Let me hear the angels sing

     

    Help me escape my cave.

     

    ©7710936pjeanmarie

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    RKCHOWDARY11 commented on Cave

    05-18-2011

    It is beautiful with sweet metaphors and very meaningful
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    jeanpnkldyg

    05/18/2011

    Thank you for stopping by! : )

    blackfootlady commented on Cave

    12-07-2010

    Not Bad,Very different and unique.I liked it.Keep writing-God-Bless
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    jeanpnkldyg

    12/07/2010

    Thank You. Many returns.

    Olan01 commented on Cave

    12-07-2010

    I live in a city cave but came from a forest dwelling where nature was my abode. Turkeys, deer, fox, coyotes, bobcats, mink, weasels, ground hogs, owls, eagles, hawks, skinks, snakes, tall oaks and hickories were at my front doors day and night. But then there were those pests; ticks, chiggers and mosquitoes were blood sucking predators who loved my warm blood. It is a wonderful experience but now I am content to visit and take my Deep Woods Off. Nice poem and filled with great meaning. Olan.
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    jeanpnkldyg

    12/07/2010

    Glad you enjoyed!

    Maleficent commented on Cave

    08-24-2010

    wow! that hit home on multiple levels... I know a giant & wallower who should read this... straight to fav's... write on! ;)
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    jeanpnkldyg

    08/25/2010

    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment - I hope it helps!

    ApaqRasgirl commented on Cave

    08-13-2010

    wonderful write dear, so many of us are trapped in our own little caves afraid to reach out. great read with very nice flow.....thanks for sharing....love asha
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    jeanpnkldyg

    08/14/2010

    So glad you stopped by to read...Many returns

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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