cloudy skies

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    cloudy skies
    living under gun metal skies
    in the gloom of your miserable rain
    flooded by uncertainty
    overwhelmed by pain

    cloud cover breaks intermittently
    as parted curtains reveal
    the smallest slice of blue hued sky
    hope seemed so surreal

    aons locked in exile
    your madness my only friend
    faithless mocking tormentor
    breaking me as I bend

    roiling, angry, ugly cloud
    smothering shades of  gray
    if I never please you
    why won't you blow away

    raindrops then had no effect
    I was already soaking wet
    and sick inside with shame
     opened my eyes and realized
    I'd only myself to blame

    not mine this dank oppresive state
    my skies are brighter blues
    I recalled the long lost clarity
    presented in their views

    bad weather is its own best friend
    on any given day
    but all it takes is warm sunshine
    to melt black clouds away

    traversing your storm systems
    searching for the way
    to only know myself again
    how often did I pray

    waiting - cold in lonliness
    you still cannot deny
    that all the while I suffered you
    I never ceased to try

    then one day...

    I did not love you anymore
    skies cleared to cornflower blue
    and the wispy remnants of all your hate
    were painted in promise's hue



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    spbsdude commented on cloudy skies

    01-20-2011

    Wow what beautiful metaphors you utilize to describe a relationship gone bad. And I love the Tori Amos piece. I got turned on to Tori Amos by the only woman I've truly been in love with. Unfortunately, we were both married to someone else at the time, and everything we shared was so intense and beautiful, but she is gone now. I've experienced stormy weather in a relationship and it is like living in a hurricane or a twister. Destructive, to say the least. But Tori Amos is an amazing lyricist. I've always loved her pieces. And she has an amazing voice. An amazing write, and glad the rainbow finally came out in the end. Maybe I'll be in love again, somewhere over the rainbow.
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    Marsink commented on cloudy skies

    01-17-2011

    I can appreciate the level of skill you transfused into this beautiful work: there is descript imagery by eloquent words in painful and sad, introspective metaphor! Some of the rain clouds we find above our heads are portable and embedded, bringing their darkened mood, even to our pillows. A real graceful storm that found blue can break through the blues! Applause Crescendo!!
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    oldgoat commented on cloudy skies

    01-17-2011

    A lot of pain in this...It's a great write but ya know something, you can even find a rainbow under an umbrella if you really look for it with your heart...
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    travisd76 commented on cloudy skies

    01-16-2011

    I am glad that the clouds are gone and your sky is finally blue. Good to see you are doing well.... :)
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    NevillePark commented on cloudy skies

    01-13-2011

    Yippie! An ear to ear grin for the lady with the rhythm to be able to dance so deftly as you spin the words around. Ginger Rogers can eat her heart out.Getting past the beauty of your footwork - - I particularly like the dialogue to the clouds. Questioning his motive for sticking around is a cool question.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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