Dance and Drift

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  • Whimsical

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    This is one of my favorite writes. I posted it to another site, and now I am bringing it here.

    Dance and Drift

    The conditions are right
    For fluffy flakes so white
    Coasting on the whim of the wind
    Finding their way to hat and mitten  

    High above, they dance and drift
    For the young a wintery gift
    Floating left and right, a swirling feat
    Sparkling diamond glints, a morning treat

    Wandering about as if not having a care
    Landing on tongues to just disappear
    Once in liquid form on days of past
    Not staying all year, never meant to last

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    Lasmuigh commented on Dance and Drift

    05-05-2013

    Lovely pacing! It really settles right in to the rhythm of the flakes themselves falling to the ground. I particularly enjoyed the image conjured by the use of the word "coasting".
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    MootPoint

    05/06/2013

    Thank you much for your comment. :)

    dahlusion commented on Dance and Drift

    02-12-2013

    A beautiful meandering of playful thoughts and meditations on snow, as if written for a children's books—bravo!
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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