Dark Passenger

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this is about everyone's evil insides

Dark Passenger

i am the crying nomad
the silent thief
of your scars i have desire
and of your love, i have only grief

you will never lie beside
or share in my tomorrow
i'm a star too bright to hide
a stranger hale but hollow

tall and gaunt
i fill myself with stolen flesh
a scourge of want
over blood and wine we mesh

for i am the dark rider
the reason behind nightmare
the last place where sanity is erased
and memories fade to despair

i am the pillow of defeat
where you rest your once mighty head
and rise into the heat
to the welcome of the dead

my soul will quench the fire
you will rot beneath
the beating of the sun
and shrivel, flower by flower

lower, lower,
into the darkness of the light 
into the middle of the hate
nothing left but discarded wings and accepted fate

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SavVySam commented on Dark Passenger

10-21-2009

Disturbing imagery. Sounds almost like a heavy metal song. For me this piece feels so disparaging, as if there is refuge in relinquishing the fight? Your style is very interesting and begs me to read on...So I am off to check out other works by you. Keep writing

dumplin commented on Dark Passenger

10-16-2009

dark, very very dark. nice flow! I liked it very much.

Artie commented on Dark Passenger

10-11-2009

This is a great piece. I love the stanza - "for i am the dark rider the reason behind nightmare the last place where sanity is erased and memories fade to despair"- great lines! 10 from me

Stardrift commented on Dark Passenger

10-06-2009

And dark poetry it certainly is. But I know it's therapy regardless of the subject. This is a more controlled write that is as well chock full of imagination. It's interesting of course, if the dark passenger is the ego. The closing line is unexpectedly potent. My mental picture immediately merged faerie wings, butterfly wings and angel wings - an extremely sad line, in a word, a downer, no pun! Personally, I love your writing improvements, unless they're flukes, lol! I can appreciate the more straight-forward mode, the more stylized versification, and the all-important flow. I'm glad I caught it before it's contest expiration at least - I've been pretty busy. Btw, my latest is titled Aquafire (and no, not aquifer, lol!). Devilish write! Ten pitchforks!!

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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