Do That Again Please

21 Comments

Tags:
  • Passion
    • ,
  • Love

    Poem Commentary

    I felt this appropriate with Valentines Day quickly approaching. The meter is a bit off, however I believe that the reader will find a way to relate to the full intent of the subject matter. jh

    Do That Again Please
    Looking out the door, through the window, I peeked under the floor to 
    see the ceiling
         I saw something there, clear as air, yet not so revealing

    There you were laying face down and looking up at the sky
         But I did not stop to stare, I just stumbled on by

    Things were a bit out of place, I must admit
         Though oddly misshapen, it seemed a perfect fit

    So I stood on my head to view where I had been
         Then out of nowhere, there you were again

    Every time you appeared I forgot what I was thinking
         I felt dain bramaged, but I hadn't been drinking

    Ah, at last now I am beginning to recall
         The mixed up feelings weren't a result of hitting my head or even a fall

    There is a simple reason for all of my crazy euphoric bliss
         It's all because of that one incredible - amazing - earth shattering KISS

    "KISS Me Again PLEASE!!!"

    Poem Comments

    (21)

    Please login or register

    You must be logged in or register a new account in order to
    leave comments/feedback and rate this poem.

    Login or Register

    optimistic commented on Do That Again Please

    12-07-2010

    I did not expect the poem to go in that direction good thought to twist it a little in my thought great poem.
    Reply to Comment

    1990lh commented on Do That Again Please

    05-20-2010

    oh nice write soul, i loved the ending, nothing like a lingering kiss leaving you wanting more ahahaha
    Reply to Comment

    soulwriter

    05/21/2010

    Nothing like that KISS! Thank you

    Marsink commented on Do That Again Please

    02-14-2010

    There is a time for most people for what is considered the 'perfect Kiss'. The world is moved, removed and set spinning again. You have taken me back in time on your rhyme machine, and I thank you!
    Reply to Comment

    soulwriter

    02/15/2010

    Oh yes, oh yes.... that shooting star KISS! Don't we just love to reminiss?! Thank you!!

    lunamarie commented on Do That Again Please

    02-08-2010

    ... hmmmm ... I think I bump into things ... haha ............ Luna
    Reply to Comment

    soulwriter

    02/09/2010

    Thank you - Again!

    MarionYost commented on Do That Again Please

    02-05-2010

    hahaha, This is simply adorable I love the "daim Bramaged" Very cute write Definitely a 10 and in my Faves! All the best -Marion-
    Reply to Comment

    soulwriter

    02/05/2010

    Why Thank YOU! So thankful that you liked it so much..

    Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

    soulwriter’s Poems (53)

    Title Comments Submitted
    Title Comments Submitted
    Along Came A Spider 0 02/05/2014
    Within This Well Worn Box 2 01/17/2014
    A Writer's Amnesia 2 07/16/2013
    Contentment 2 10/04/2011
    Love Hurts 6 05/26/2011
    Sadistic Captivity 0 05/25/2011
    Within This Glass 2 05/23/2011
    A Boy Named Alice (I dream of white rabbits) 57 11/28/2010
    L I M B O 21 11/18/2010
    Beautiful Stranger 19 10/12/2010
    Symbolic Differences 17 10/05/2010
    Drowning in a Sea of Me 18 09/09/2010
    Without Fail 16 08/31/2010
    Oil Painting 12 07/05/2010
    Beneath the Tree 42 05/11/2010
    Pretty Bullets 32 04/28/2010
    Wishing Her Well 18 04/18/2010
    The Death of Life 22 04/15/2010
    Don’t Live Without Love 17 04/10/2010
    Never Ever After 14 04/06/2010
    Nature's Little Surprises 16 03/02/2010
    Love, Lust, and Lingering Sensations 13 02/24/2010
    My Haunting Heart 17 02/17/2010
    Weathering The Winds of Trust 12 02/04/2010
    Do That Again Please 21 01/30/2010
    Love's Coffin 48 12/09/2009
    It Hurts 31 12/07/2009
    In Every Living Space 14 10/29/2009
    UNITED TEARS OF SYMPATHY AND STRENGTH 21 09/11/2009
    Gargoyle (Girl) 27 09/10/2009
    Controlled 14 09/08/2009
    Your Love Is Poetry 25 09/03/2009
    BRIEF ENCOUNTERS 10 09/02/2009
    Why Not Spend A Fantasy On Me 13 09/02/2009
    Nothing Can Compare 8 09/01/2009
    Melancholy Cure 10 08/25/2009
    Our Daydream Dance 8 09/02/2009
    Vanishing 30 08/11/2009
    All That You Are 10 12/10/2009
    Words Worth 43 07/27/2009
    SEASHELL SOUL 17 07/20/2009
    Black 37 07/13/2009
    The Toy 23 07/28/2009
    The Rose Eternal 28 06/22/2009
    Whisper From Behind the Mirror 38 06/20/2009
    Stormy Purification 13 06/04/2009
    Love Stains 19 05/13/2009
    The Tree Within 19 06/18/2009
    I Practice Moving Meditation... 12 04/27/2009
    The Gallows of Destructive Love 10 04/27/2009
    Love of the Soul 15 08/01/2009
    Crystal Iris 14 04/22/2009
    The Nature of Relationship 24 07/15/2009
    Top of Page