Driving Past Graves

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Driving Past Graves

Driving silently past graves behind a fence
Somber souls of different walks been spent
Some have been buried throughout the years.
Teenagers who have given their lovers tears.


Shells of people rotting in the cold ground
Some from cancer, some crashed and drowned
Some from gang gun fire, some during sex
One from writing bouncing, fraudulent checks


Desperate souls snuffed at their own hand
Life’s too short to be written in the sand
Many hearts have come to a screeching halt
Death comes to everyone, who’s at fault?


Makes one think of a time fated to come
When our walk on this world will yet be done.
Make your actions count each and every day,
Don’t just sit on this Earth as if made of red clay.

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mustascheman commented on Driving Past Graves

07-16-2010

That's right! Why 'sit on this Earth' when you can stand forever in the fires of HELL!!! A neat poem, to be sure!

cheronld commented on Driving Past Graves

07-16-2010

Live everyday as if it was your last because it just may be....great write my friend....Cher

Oblaidon

07/16/2010

Cemeteries are a reminder that we won't be here forever. I tried to express the best I could the feelings I have while passing a cemetery. Thanks for the comment. -Al

rsalassi commented on Driving Past Graves

07-06-2010

A second reading of this changes my mind from the earlier remarks. Nicely done, but still too encompassing.....perhaps?

Crush commented on Driving Past Graves

05-13-2010

great idea and i do like it....this has moments of brillinance. however, with all due respect, i feel it missing something that can turn it from good to great. maybe i don't have this right to critique, but i think it is missing something. thanks, mate.

Oblaidon

05/13/2010

I'd like to hear your critique. What is it missing for you? Where would you go with it?

Christina13 commented on Driving Past Graves

12-28-2009

Wow ! I wish everyone had this philosophy. It reminds me of what Brandon Lee said in "the Crow", when he's in the cop's apartment "Nothing is trivial". This is a real inspiring poem, I can see people refering to this poem as a classic. just like they do with "the raven", "she walks in beautiy", "marriage of heaven and hell", or "divine commedy". grate work. I can't wait to read more from you.

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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Skinny Dipping 20
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Sign of the Cross 12
Love Embraced 21
Our Biggest Threat 14
In God I Trust 10
Driving Past Graves 17
When I was a Kid. 18
Pets by our Side 8
Rocky Shores 10
A minuscule bug 14
Heart of a Poet 29
My Armor is Faith 12
For Our Troops 8
Baby Has a Name. 17
My MI 3
My Love 8
The Grace of God 13
Rhyming Poems 20