Drunken Memories

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Written in response to UPA Forum Post: Traffic
6/16/2009

May this poem bring soberness to someone's life...
Marcus

Drunken Memories

With screeching, screaming tires,
Billowing smoke; blaring horn,
Thunderous crash, flesh a'ripping;
As on angel's wings I'm borne

Back through flashing memories
To the birth of my first child;
So much joy my soul to relish,
Such perfection, heart beguiled

On to school on first day crying;
Broken heart, I stood alone...
Watching babe I ere have cradled
Walking, smiling, going... gone

Now, 'tis night of graduation,
Standing tall in cap and gown;
Soon my side he will be leaving...
So in drink my sorrows drown.

I see the Kodak's of time and season
Flash before my tumbling eyes
And as my car is torn to pieces
On wings of death, I realize...

 Selfish thoughts now have taken
Drunken father from loving son,
And the Kodak's of his tomorrow
Will forever be... minus one.


Marcus Lewis
6/16/2009

Written in response to UPA Challenge: Traffic
Posted on public forum.







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frog commented on Drunken Memories

08-02-2009

'Minus one'...Such a powerful portrayal of realization. This poem had an effect on me as if I was hit by a brick. You did a wonderful job with this write.

JCKasper commented on Drunken Memories

07-31-2009

Albeit sobering (Pun Intended) , It really strikes at the heart in today's society of a very serious problem --------- This is well written and something that most people (Including Myself) can relate to ........ I have a son who just turned 16 and has his driver's permit ! Great Job !!!

UnworthyFather

08/01/2009

Thank you very much, JCKasper. I really hope this poem hits a spot with people. Thank you again. Marcus

1blackbarbie commented on Drunken Memories

07-30-2009

YES!!! I agree with everyone else. it was very well written. You are a very good poet. Hopefully as time goes by, I too can be as good as you.

UnworthyFather

08/01/2009

Thank you very much, Ma'am, for kindness and support. I am sure that you are much better than I am. Marcus

badgerbutterfly commented on Drunken Memories

07-29-2009

Hello Unworthy Father.... I love this poem as it was hard to read...having lost two people I love from a drunk driver.. Very well versed.. I rate it an honest 10.. Keep up the writing...Good Work!!...

UnworthyFather

08/01/2009

Thank you so much, Ma'am. I am deeply sorry for your loss. Marcus

Rocetman commented on Drunken Memories

07-28-2009

Put to words in perfect form, I give a lot of nine's to the talent that I read . but you my friend are getting a lot of ten's!! I'll be reading alot more of your work,, thank's..

UnworthyFather

07/28/2009

Thank you very much, Sir, for your support,and kindness. Marcus

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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