Eye On The Sparrow

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    Eye On The Sparrow

    Ah, the brightly falling lightness

    Of sparrow fall down

    Strewn in snow stained witness

    Frozen feathers abound

     

    If God promised watching

    He’s reckoning the cat

    Gets hell or redemption

    For perpetrating that.

     

    Ah, the ominous thud

    Of the soldier just thrown

    He’s fast leaking blood

    From the land mine that’s blown

     

    Since God is surely watching

    He’ll forgive the hungry cat

    But damn the one to hell

    Who just calculated that.


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    ginga commented on Eye On The Sparrow

    12-27-2010

    Harver, Although death is imminent here there is something natural and engaging about the plight of the sparrow here. I like this poem but cannot really say why. ginga
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    HarverTomsson

    12/27/2010

    I know why, "You've been the hungry cat!" Can you say "fried chicken?" LOL Harv

    HIP13044b commented on Eye On The Sparrow

    12-23-2010

    This is a very clever write. I like this a whole lot!!! Action and reaction, with the intent behind each. Nicely done.
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    HarverTomsson

    12/23/2010

    Thanks for the read. I feel fortunate to be the recipient of your attention. Harv

    Hampton commented on Eye On The Sparrow

    12-23-2010

    The analogy is striking in this cleverly conceived write that provides a message that cannot be ignored. Good write Harv.
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    HarverTomsson

    12/23/2010

    Thank you Hampton, and Happy Christmastide to you. Harv

    carynontherhine commented on Eye On The Sparrow

    12-23-2010

    I always say you are just to much! Your mind is a time bomb at times I believe with your imagination that runs wild. This is thought producing for me as I traveled along from the frozen bird to the soldier. A cat? No, there is a meaning I know you. You must reveal sometime. I love the write though as it definitely has your signature all over it. Hugz
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    HarverTomsson

    12/23/2010

    The poem is a brief commentary on the nature of life on earth. There is a cycle of life due to the predator/prey relationship on the food chain, but then there is the other kind of issue between the aggressor/defensive behaviors among humans toward one another. One of them seems to be a fore-ordained consequence of the fall (from a Christian world view), the other a volitional act that is morally indefensible to be that aggressor toward another human. Both creatures were just trying to stay alive, but only mankind (in this pairing) engages in war. Harv

    mustascheman commented on Eye On The Sparrow

    12-23-2010

    Interesting....Certainly well thought out and appropriate for this time we live in. It is a pleasure to read mature, well written poetry on this site, as those are few and far between. Well done. A.T.
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    HarverTomsson

    12/23/2010

    Thank you for both reading, and leaving an approbation trail. Harv

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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