Faith of An Unbeliever

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    this is what it is...tell me your truths

    Faith of An Unbeliever

    the bells ring for the faithful to attend
    the meanings of which i cannot pretend
    i stand outside the edifice,
    wondering at the sacrifice
    of a king i shall never  meet
    for i doubt he is there to greet
    and my life is left hollow inside
    a raw pillar to the world of winds
    unweathered despite my many sins
    my constant sorrow a reminisce
    trade this life for an eternity of bliss
    if only I could believe
    blindly and forever
    the convenience of a shared fantasy
    wouldn’t my life be easier
    if only I could fall to my knees and see
    what others find so simple
    born into faith like a fawn becomes a deer
    think not for what is lost
    for what is lost was never yours
    the simple life of a fishermen
    casting on overcast shores
    the words of men who never knew a saviour
    another version of the life everafter
    so many questions I can leave at the door
    and never bother to enter
    truths left to wither and die
    as corpses lie rotting in the morning tide
    all these images and all these dreams
    and still I kneel
    feeling less than nothing

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    BDIsernhagen commented on Faith of An Unbeliever

    06-29-2009

    a very touching poem, it got right deep in there, tugging on something deep inside. God bless.

    AmadeusEx

    06/29/2009

    this poem has been in my head for years, im glad you felt what i was trying to say, thank you

    WhisperingWind commented on Faith of An Unbeliever

    06-27-2009

    I think everyone had the feelings at one point or another, my religous beliefs are very much different than most. But I don't judge others about their beliefs....very well written and I commend your courge for posting this, religion is an easy way to get a fight start! I enjoyed reading this piece. Great layout!

    AmadeusEx

    06/29/2009

    thank you whisper, i appreciate you reading it

    oldsoul commented on Faith of An Unbeliever

    06-25-2009

    also, I disagree with Lizsia, i think the ending can be interpreted for believer and non believer alike. When you are in love with Christ, and you do something that requires repentence, going before him, you feel like scum, or less than nothing. Just as you feel when you dissapoint any one else you care deeply about. as a nonbeliever, you may not be able to wrap ur mind around something so massive, and seemingly unexplainable. I mean, why would you believe in the breeze since you cannot see....oh, but wait...you can feel it.. mini sermon, lol. But science has done such a good job of explaining EVERYTHING, there is no room for a God that those with little faith cannot see. So when you kneel before the unknown purely out of attraction to others attraction like a moth to a flame... the desire is not in the right place, and so u feel less than nothing. thank you for leaving th end open. I enjoy when I can read someone elses work, but still use my own imagination

    oldsoul commented on Faith of An Unbeliever

    06-25-2009

    this is really, really amazing. Im a chrsitian, and was born into a long line of apostolics, that is not to say that I'm not human I have doubts, same as you, fears, same as you, there were times I would ask my parents a question, or someone else in church, and the answer would be something along the lines of "Because the Bible says so" this only, of course, fueled my desire to know on my own. And like so many other things in life, I researched answers on my own. Your faith is stronger when you develop your own convictions. Fears subside, questions evolve into answers... if you ever want to talk let me know

    AmadeusEx

    06/25/2009

    this poem came out of my catholic upbringing and the frustration i feel everytime i think about faith...when i have never once had even a twinge of it occur inside my own body, and i dont feel that i am an evil, or immoral, or sinful person, no more sinful than you or anybody else...this poem really sums up my experience as an unwilling unbeliever...i dont think that i can ever force faith on myself...thank you for such an indepth comment though, im pleased that i got such a great reaction out of you

    babyfire04 commented on Faith of An Unbeliever

    06-24-2009

    Great job describing someone without faith that wished they had the blind trust to follow a faith that they cannot see. I enjoyed it very much.

    AmadeusEx

    06/29/2009

    thank you for the comment babyfire, i really liked this poem and im glad you took the time to read it

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