Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

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    Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

    coral stones
    in an ancient eldritch sea
    misdeeds are precedents
    for recreational electives
    torching
    smoking
    inhalations

    on pox-filled hollow cheeked natives
    tongue-in-cheek relatives
    fire breathing
    dragon lady
    dancing panda bear
    engravings

    over wrought deceitful lies
    disgrace the dream
    of alien nights
    as bogus reindeer feed
    on purple majesties

    the broccoli suffers
    beneath parched leaves
    golden morning
    precious stone
    romance burning

    as the world slides through
    eternally machining
    machinations
    incarnations
    of hesitant gods

    animals splashing through
    spring-time floods
    the measure of man
    as brilliant as a pinwheel
    fossilized in amber

    encased in glass
    passions running wild
    under star-sticker ceiling tiles
    freedom believing
    slavery will end

    yield to the whim
    of a woman without man
    stomping cages
    romping through pages
    suicidal missions

    unpredictable
    forbidden amongst the middens
    of an ancient trash heap
    where all the dogs will sleep
    beneath the sea of endless greenery

    the only blue bonnie lass still breathing
    inside the iris
    of a giant cloud seeding
    impossibly demeening
    after only one meeting

    like pressure building
    and steaming islands sprouting
    palm trees screaming
    mud flash flooding
    down scree strewn hillsides

    ocean to ocean
    unstoppable emotion
    plugged by the motions
    the endless commotion
    of six billion

    mouth breathing
    flesh-chewing
    idea spewing
    short lived
    foolish fools
    pretending

    in ghouls with wings
    swords and overlords
    of bad taste mistreating
    the trinity of ghosts
    racing

    towards an ending
    of sorts
    religion mixes well
    with vodka
    and carribbean resorts

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    Tempy commented on Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

    12-08-2009

    nicely written my cats name is trinity just saying :) its very intriguing

    knight4696 commented on Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

    12-05-2009

    LOL !!! ) I love the ending man!! ..... Another very cool poem ... Love the imagery and the journey ..... But the ending is the Best - ................................................................................... "towards an ending of sorts - religion mixes well with vodka and carribbean resorts" Awesome Write!! : ) .... Ken

    AmadeusEx

    12/07/2009

    thanks knight

    BigDaddyCash commented on Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

    11-23-2009

    This is what I call poetic elegance, words of magic painted with an extraordinary artists brush. Your message is clear, imagery is flawless and the plot is represented with golden words of talent. You really are on target with this powerful choice of words. Your thoughts and feelings are felt in your amazing gift as a poet. Thanks for sharing. LOL, BDC

    AmadeusEx

    11/23/2009

    from you that means quite a bit, thank you...check out THE BLOOM OF DEATH, it expires today and i love to see what you think of it

    BadBadBear commented on Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

    11-21-2009

    Well that's one way of saying here's your world and the ratrace that goes on in it. All are lost, forever searching for themselves while the gears keep turning. Let's kick back, have a drink and discuss religious ramifications before the end.

    Rygar commented on Fall Into the Stream and Hold Your Breath

    11-20-2009

    well, well, well.... what to say about this piece of art.... not only is it imaginative and well crafted, but a lot of fun to read. the content was whimsical and indeed a trip as you said. nicely done amad, this will be one of ten in my favorites.

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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