Who can guess what I was thinking when I wrote this piece?

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I Loved you, even before I realized that I could never live without you.

I wanted your perfect Love, even before I knew it's name.

I desired your Holy spirit, even before I knew that it existed.

I felt your Son's hurt, even though I could never fully overstand his pain.


Just to behold you, Brings back memories that were there before I actually beheld you.

Maybe it was in another time,

Another place,

Maybe even on another plane of existence.

How we came in contact:

Is Irrelevant.

In my mind we've been together,

Intimately been together.

And is planning to be together for the rest of our lives.

You see,

I'm determined to be a part of your life.

Just like it's inevitable that you are a part of mines.

Now I know unfortunately I may have doubted you at times,

And even gave my loyalty to despair.

But just to know that you are there,

With me no matter where.

Is reassuring enough to get me through my empty and sometimes lifeless stare.

See you are like a beacon of light that guides me through the dark and gloomy storm.

Able to take on any shape and any form.

You resist,

When others conform.

Deep within the triple darkness where you were born.

I close my eyes and feel safe from all harm.

Now I'm positively sure I can't live without you,

Because you are one of a kind.

Because you see.

I Loved you,

Even before you became a living thought inside my mind.

Haki "The HottestNewPoet" Natuwah

Hotep! Thanks to everyone who participated in what I love. Poetry is my life and I appreciate those who took the time and listened to my thoughts and feelings. I want to give an extra shout out to my new friend Crosby. Sometimes it's the small things that cause the biggest impact............
*Remember.............To Be INTERESTING you must first be INTERESTED.

Hotep!

Last edited by HakiNatuwah1 10-03-2009 at 09:37:07 PM

Re: Who can guess what I was thinking when I wrote this piece?

I think that you were trying to be intentionally lazy in not using the proper English language. My opinion, and after all, it is only one opinion, the English language suffers enough abuse now without any other further help. Don't mean to be harsh, but use real words to write. After all, are you writing poetry, or texting it?

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Well Hakin, it is quite obvious what you were thinking with this piece. You were reborn. You didn't believe in God, and now you do. Way to go with that and with this creative work of art.

And Crosby...my best to you, and give my regards to your landlord...

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[iI read your poem and I think it's AWESOME!! I believe you are referring to our higher power, whom we all refer to as the Almighty God! Or Budda or whatever you'd like to call him.
To name him or her is not important, only to acknowledge and adore him, lean on him and praise him for all we know and have in this meager existence. The true life begins after we shed this earthly body. Any way, I really enjoyed reading your poem, it is truly beautiful. As I'm sure you must be also. Thank You for sharing your innermost thoughts. Dustydai

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Thank you so so much Dustydai for being interested in my poetry and also for all the great compliments that you gave me. I am a pretty wonderful and a awesome person if I must say so myself......lol.......But 4real I am very humble and I've learned not to take anything or anyone for granted. Please read my poem "To be Seen, But not Touched" This piece changed the way that I see and appreciate God's creation. We are all part of a greater design and we must learn to respect beauty in it's natural element. We as humans sometime forget that we are not the Creators (of not even our own lives) and therefore we don't have the right to do what we please with it. Possession is only for the Creator, not the Created..............Thanks again my friend and please don't be a stranger!!!

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Originally Posted by gogant

Well Hakin, it is quite obvious what you were thinking with this piece. You were reborn. You didn't believe in God, and now you do. Way to go with that and with this creative work of art.

And Crosby...my best to you, and give my regards to your landlord...

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Okay Hakin, the other thing could be your always wanting to be able to express yourself through writing. The Son and the Spirit don't fit in there, somehow or other, though.
I can't wait to hear your reason.........................................g.

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Originally Posted by HakiNatuwah1

Thank you so so much Dustydai for being interested in my poetry and also for all the great compliments that you gave me. I am a pretty wonderful and a awesome person if I must say so myself......lol.......But 4real I am very humble and I've learned not to take anything or anyone for granted. Please read my poem "To be Seen, But not Touched" This piece changed the way that I see and appreciate God's creation. We are all part of a greater design and we must learn to respect beauty in it's natural element. We as humans sometime forget that we are not the Creators (of not even our own lives) and therefore we don't have the right to do what we please with it. Possession is only for the Creator, not the Created..............Thanks again my friend and please don't be a stranger!!!

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So, what do you say, Hakin....what were you thinking when you wrote what you wrote ?

gogant..........................

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I too loved Him before I even gave myself to Him. He is the one and only, the Great I AM. The One True King of Kings. He is God.

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So, what do you say, Hakin....what were you thinking when you wrote what you wrote ?

gogant..........................

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I, too, thought that the poem was a reflection of a love for God. Thinking that it must be about our creator. The third verse, I think, about the holy spirit, made me think it has to be a poem of a spiritual nature. Has anyone's guesses been right? At least partially right in some way? No one can know exactly what you were thinking cause any time we read anyone's writings we interpret it through our own lense of experiences. I liked it though. I was a bit disheartened that the first comment was rather negative and critical, but it was nice to see your positive response to it! So what exactly was intentional. You said he was right about some of it being lazy...just typos or something? I make too many myself to ever let that really interfer with my reading of poetry. I'm glad for the few who have offered the correct spelling here and there though, it does help I guess (to those people where suck details matter! LOL!)

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....you wrote like you were thinking about angels

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Originally Posted by ListninEar

I, too, thought that the poem was a reflection of a love for God. Thinking that it must be about our creator. The third verse, I think, about the holy spirit, made me think it has to be a poem of a spiritual nature. Has anyone's guesses been right? At least partially right in some way? No one can know exactly what you were thinking cause any time we read anyone's writings we interpret it through our own lense of experiences. I liked it though. I was a bit disheartened that the first comment was rather negative and critical, but it was nice to see your positive response to it! So what exactly was intentional. You said he was right about some of it being lazy...just typos or something? I make too many myself to ever let that really interfer with my reading of poetry. I'm glad for the few who have offered the correct spelling here and there though, it does help I guess (to those people where suck details matter! LOL!)

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ok, i would like to give this a shot.
I too thought you were writing about God. But since you say were wrong,

i read it again but i didnt read for depth..
im thinking possibly, a bestfriend that you had, that you didnt realize you had feelings for.
Until later down the line..Then you realized you loved him all along?

I know im more than likely wrong, just though id give it a try. lol.

-Crys.,

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my guess is it's not GOD,or JESUS,but your holy spirit that lives within side,from everlasting of time,who was there before we were born,to walk with us,talk,to lead and guide

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this was right on and beautiful freshprince, keep up the good work angel2

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Originally Posted by XxCrys92xX

ok, i would like to give this a shot.
I too thought you were writing about God. But since you say were wrong,

i read it again but i didnt read for depth..
im thinking possibly, a bestfriend that you had, that you didnt realize you had feelings for.
Until later down the line..Then you realized you loved him all along?

I know im more than likely wrong, just though id give it a try. lol.

-Crys.,

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Originally Posted by marley4461

....you wrote like you were thinking about angels

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Originally Posted by marley4461

....you wrote like you were thinking about angels

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