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the internet is down

09-21-2009 at 06:49:56 PM
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the internet is down

the internet is down


it's down
it's down

i think i'm down
are you down?

i can't get my mail
i can't get my mail

i can't get on yahoo
can you get your yahoo?

i think we're down
i think we're down

i was on face book and then nothing
i was on face book and then nothing

call the cable company
call the cable company
call the cable company

check the router
check the router
the modem too
the modem too

this sucks
this sucks
this really sucks

no internet
no internet
no internet

wait
hold-on
i got yahoo
and face book
i think were back up
ok, yea , were back
are you back up ?
yea , i'm back up

ok, great
good
beautiful
great
good
thank god
were up.........

09-21-2009 at 07:46:02 PM

Re: the internet is down

Comical but real and to the point.....very likeable with the simplicity it a good read grin

09-24-2009 at 06:24:24 AM
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Re: the internet is down

funny...the frustration we all share at such moments is there...may I suggest a companion poem about taking the damned pc for granted when it's up and running. Your abrupt ending when it comes back on even suggests such a response.

09-24-2009 at 07:21:42 AM
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the internet is down

the internet is truly amazing - i kid you not -
man kinds biggest revolution -

09-24-2009 at 12:34:36 PM

Re: the internet is down

Okay, not bad. We all can relate, which makes this really good. But the OVER-repetition makes the poem a little.. less, to me. Certain things I can understand repeating: "call the cable company" or "check the router, the modem too." The redundancy is usually a bad idea in any poem, so use it carefully.
Otherwise, high-five! Good job!

09-24-2009 at 02:18:38 PM
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the internet is down

Thanks I'll keep that in mind !

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.