NIGHT THOUGHTS

who then
enters this
intellectual
abyss
where
thought
has no
end
and its
beginning
has no one
with which
to
validate
itself.
I am
your captain
blindly
you follow me
yet
I walk behind.
Will my words
bear the mirror
an echo long past
of things to come
and direction
only relevant
to those living
with
perpetual self doubt?
Comes now
a sailor
whose ship
was lost at sea
isn't the abyss
a resting place
for ships, you and me?
Alive I was
taken for granted
in death
all remember me
as with
intellectual fodder
in the abyss
that
no one can see.


Plz comment, help me with this one.

Last edited by hoth2o 11-01-2009 at 01:29:18 AM

Re: NIGHT THOUGHTS

Id like some feedback on this post please....

Re: NIGHT THOUGHTS

Ive seen that abyss before...down that hole...i like the message, its well disguised yet to the point of fully understanding...i dont like how it is structured, its hard to read and the scheme i think, needs to be in longer lines...read mine?


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