challenging, indeed

Well, since the last challenge was such a success, I thought I might as well include this other challenge now.

Write about the color of one of the following:

enthusiasm
need
lethargy
pity
conscience
ego
hunger

I wish a heartfelt good luck to all of the creative minds who accept this challenge!

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Form 7 quintrains, (1 for each 7 word description request)
11 syllables, each stanza rhymes complete





The Color of Enthusiasm


enthusiasm comes with colors of bright
heart-beating babies' energy that is light
with cores that burst like fireworks in dark night
excitement blends like rainbows in a new flight
expanding dreams, new-streams from visions once tight.





The Color of Need


the color need is sometimes met with green greed
and cauldron-hearts will fester selfish, dark bleed
the universe is growing wants as a weed
with black hole showers giving as a ripe seed
to layer lands with autumn bounty gold feed.





The Color of Lethargy


old lethargy, no energy, just real blue
the coffee and the soda are dark speed brew
the mood is jolted then left hanging, the foo'
is me when I use fake instead of real, to
feed my cells with Live, Raw foods, and I knew.






The Color of Pity


my pity comes as Christmas wrapped with bold tie
of sugar kindness, dancing sprinkles, and I
ate death upon my breath as pastry, sweet why?
no nutrients, no needs fulfilled, my veins cry
without the real foods, hungry cells will soon die.





The color of Conscience


My conscience, looked inside the back door gray screen
the inside colors scrambled up like egg scream
the fat mistakes were put in baggage to bring
my sunset warms me, I don't live in hot steam
my heaven includes, every one, like a dream.





The Color of Ego


My ego lives inside a circus side show
we mostly keep her cage padlocked when we go
amongst the humans, drama is her best pose
she likes the spotlight, where she thinks that she glows
but sometimes she gets knocked off her pedastals.




The Color of Hunger


I hunger for my earth to stay bright green
I long to see the gardens for the whole team
I hunger for a world that is not mean
I want to eat the knowledge, like ice cream
and not get sick from Government Regime.


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Springsize,
I was totally blown away! I would be hard pressed to pick a favorite among these, as each one is so powerful. I absolutely love the style in which you write and was moved by each and every subject. If we were able to rate his here from 1-10, you would deserve a 10x10!!!

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I agree! Springsize brought us awesome writing and by it I smile! wOOt!

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too cool ! thank you simoneaugustus and ccslim

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Last edited by jpmaster13 05-14-2010 at 12:26:59 PM

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Hunger

Bloody lust, burns,
Pulls the outside in,
Key to unlock,
Mr.Torche's chain,

Numbing the mangled mind,
Primal tendancies take over,
Shying away from shots of pain,
To feed the addictions inside

I just wrote it, I don't like it, feels almost like two poems... XD

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I suppose I can see where you might feel like it's two separate poems, but maybe a third stanza placed between the 2 to tie it together? Just an idea. And I would love to see you name a color when describing this hunger. All this aside, it is without doubt the beginning of a very powerful poem with strong images. I love the creative direction you took with this assignment and would love to see how it ends up if you decide to tweak it a little bit. Thanks!
~Simone

Last edited by simoneaugustus 05-14-2010 at 02:17:26 PM

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Hunger

Bloody lust, burns,
(Blood=red Fire=red)

Pulls the outside in,
(Got nothin)

Key to unlock,
(Again nothin)

Mr.Torche's chain,
(Torch is a fire,)



Numbing the mangled mind,
(Nothin -.-)

Primal tendancies take over,
(Animalistic feels red to me)

Shying away from shots of pain,
(Guns+shots=blood red)

To feed the addictions inside

Its a bit of a streach, I was thinking hunger, red :P

Last edited by jpmaster13 05-14-2010 at 03:32:10 PM

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Right on, I got ya! I sort of thought red for the first stanza but wasn't as certain with the second. Thanks for clarifying!

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Devining the Colors of the Heart



Express by transcendent beauty
Defined by the radiance of all within me
I long to express so that you may know
The heartfelt creations of my soul in prose

White

When trapped within the White of Need
Wishful thinking of peace and tranquility
Never surrender your right to be
Hold fast to what is White, Need for peace

Sapphire

Growing anticipation with Sapphire Enthusiasm
Honest desires of pure intentions you hold within
And I grin within my transcending plethora trends
Enthusiastic is the Sapphire and can comprehend

Crimson

Honest desires of peace corrupt by Crimson’s Hunger
Heating your soul within the fierce fiery thunder
The longing for more, lost in the abyss of all that is never
Crimson abyss of the unending Hunger which I wander

Ivory

And still it grows, stretching itself into an Ivory Ego
You learn all your knowledge obtained. Deceitful
What is left of who you were, so very corruptible?
Lost with the Ivory darkness, Ego’s to own

Ashen

But the harm you cause contained by Ashen Conscience
Consuming knowledge expressed by plethora is less
Confess your sins to learn what is to be cursed by blessed
Conscience of Ashen so forlorn, consuming all it is against

Raven

When all is consumed and all that is left is Raven Lethargy
An abyss of doubt, of hate and so utterly empty
No where to turn, no reason to run away to your dreams
For what good are dreams with the Lethargy of the Raven’s beauty

Pity

From within your heart you feel the Pity of Rust
Ending the turn, the cycle of all, creating a dusk
I must trust that you will not forget the Colors of Us
For now starts a Need for peace within Pity’s Rust

Forever more it continues, though sometimes there is change
The Colors I learned of what it I long and feel do rein
A prose of life and cycles I longed to express to you
Written down to be forever remembered as truth

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Superchick,
I don't know how I missed this when you posted it, and I'm sorry I did. This was incredible! I love the sheer beauty of your words and as the poem went on, I was excited to what colors you would ascribe to each. Pity as rust was genius!! I feel cheated at not seeing this sooner, but I am so glad I found it!! Bravo!
~Simone

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The Color of Need

Need is a blank canvas waiting
for the brush's tender stroke.
Any color that coats the bare white
will be absorbed, taken in.

Need wants reflection of vibrancy;
Superbly alert to all energies -
Color comes with satisfaction
which is never attained.

Need is a pale comparison
To its sibling, Love.


Yeah, something like that!

Last edited by kah 10-25-2010 at 06:21:37 AM

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Kah, this is SO beautifully worded! I am especially partial to your lines 'need is a pale comparison to its sibling, love.' Stunning!!! And while I never would have thought of white for need, it is totally fitting the way you've described it here. Excellent work!

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Thank you, simoneaugustus!