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when you stir in your sleep (new erotica)

07-03-2010 at 09:33:26 AM

when you stir in your sleep (new erotica)

turn out the lights, light a candle,
and read: "when you stir in your sleep"

07-04-2010 at 11:44:18 AM

RE: when you stir in your sleep (new erotica)

from OP member "ginga"

Srirring in one's sleep seems quite heavenly according to what played out beyond that first stir. I love that you can take something so inconsequential and develop a poem of soft erotica from a nuance of sleep. That's dahism, writing from a gesture that connotes a larger more vital life blood.

07-06-2010 at 05:34:13 PM

RE: when you stir in your sleep (new erotica)

"simoneaugustus" commented on when you stir in your sleep

07-03-2010
I don't believe I've ever gotten goose bumps from poetry before this. This was so incredibly erotic and sensual, and as is your habit, you captured with perfect clarity something that was formerly an undefinable moment of intimacy. You have the enviable talent of finding the elusive words to bring back to life some of the most special moments ever experienced. Shame on you for making a married woman swoon, lol!

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Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)