Grey and Old

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    Grey and Old

    I have never seen so much human kindness...
    In all my days;was it my own selfish blindness?
    Looking threw the corridors of my mind.
    It may be the path chosen I could not find.
    Enchanted moments of giggling and laughter.
    What was I missing for or was I after?
    Perhaps I talked to much and wonder...
    Forgot the joy and chose cheap talk and thunder.
    I'm sitting here so hampered in shame and alone.
    Imagining developing this certain new tone.
    For you have all entered my tortured heart.
    You have handed me your keys and given me a start.
    Beneath the sunlit sky across an ocean bay.
    I'm stunned by your stance and so rendered to stay.
    A darkened soul sits before the dimmer nights.
    An enlightened soul stands before your sights.
    Was it a friend holding my hand;saving my soul?
    Inhaling the grateful breath of life:  
    When a journey to a destiny is just to turn 
               Grey and Old...

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    loneehorse commented on Grey and Old

    12-12-2009

    I agree with Mr.Gee you have talent in this one.Very well exspressed.

    blackfootlady

    12/12/2009

    ty so much for your comment,Churv

    MrGee commented on Grey and Old

    12-07-2009

    EXCELLENT! The rhymn of the poem is very good and it also has good rhythmn . You paint a very good picture in the mind of the reader. I especially enjoy the line that reads - I'm stunned by your stance and so rendered to stay. this work is obviously a 10 from me. Thank you for the read. Mrgee

    blackfootlady

    12/07/2009

    Oh Wow,MrGee,ty so much Sir and God Bless

    Hampton commented on Grey and Old

    12-06-2009

    An enjoyable poem for the readers eyes. Full of sincere expression.

    blackfootlady

    12/06/2009

    You really have nice comments on my writes,ty

    soulwriter commented on Grey and Old

    12-05-2009

    There is so much truth in your sentiment - and the summation ends in a conclusion that every soul should know "Inhaling the grateful breath of life growing Grey and old... Well written and expressed!

    blackfootlady

    12/06/2009

    Yes,Good point,ty!I have good friends that reminded me of that so I exspressed in my own style and manor the best I knew how.I'm also very grateful to get such healthy remarks this soon,ty very much.

    WinterFrost commented on Grey and Old

    12-05-2009

    I like your writing style very much good meter good verse yours, Winter

    blackfootlady

    12/05/2009

    Ty winter,I have more poetry under churv that I like too.I'm not much of critic but I liked your style too.

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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