Idle While....


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Idle While....

i cut out my heart
dug my knife in deep
stripped down the bark
licked at the blood
and weeped

this is not for me,
this addiction so deep
ten years falling
down the same dry well

unconscious and slack
a picture of all i lack
hanging askew
quivering on a thumbtack

rack yourself on angel's dust
magenta streaked wrists
suck out the rust
and lie

naked beneath the shredded sky
the light is so far away
breathing like a newborn
floating in a skin of wine

somewhere long ago
on the shores of Noname
i am a torn lizard
in the teeth of a rabid eagle

spinning out of control
into the bottom
how quick the silence can descend
mouths' moving behind sheets of glass

never reaching into me
i feel less than nothing
but i keep on veering
further past the bend of the moon

a journey of a million miles
on an endless high
death's head
maniacally smiling

i torture myself
with the evidence of my destruction
casually manipulate my frontal lobe
with stainless steel surgical tools

drag through my memories
searching for my own dead body
hoping i surface
with all the reasons

why i failed
clearly written on my body
in runes of raised flesh
i cant incorporate

my eyes never undilate
the decisions i make
i probably fake
absurd foreseen mistake

the beauty all around
armageddon choirs singing
for the muscles to keep moving

beneath decrepit wishes
still dreaming
im alone in my bed screaming

friction dissolves any chance i have
at passing away peacefully
raw nerves exposed
to the degradation of society
i cant help but wither and writhe

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JayJ420 commented on Idle While....


ahhh....the pain, hard to obstain and refrain.....

girlygirl1234 commented on Idle While....


this is good i liek it alot. you put alot of emotional feeling into your poems and thats what i like about you. good job...............GG

NacolleMarie commented on Idle While....


very very well written! you are quite talented! I enjoyed this piece!

KING commented on Idle While....


Though you had a peril of pain in your writing it still flowed like a river and was quite moving. I hope you find solace and new words to replace the ones that have struck you with pain...... -KING

dakcalhoun commented on Idle While....


Fuck yeah....i was worried that everyone on here sucked at writing real shit but then I read this...damn good dude



much appreciated dak, check out my piece crossing bridges, you might like that one as well

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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