Immolated

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Immolated

here I stand
woke up from a dream of lies
the earth like glass
I can't grasp
a moment of peace
there is no release
from my disease
I cannot ease
others lives only complicate
my tenuous ties
and make the world a darker place
I break every mirror I face
and here I stand
in this world of lies
bitten by flies of failure
and disgrace
there is no redemption
no hope
no fall from grace
a sideways tunnel to the next world of hate
a fear i cant negate
or negotiate
I walk a line
between destruction and redemption
I drink fire
and I drown in expression
my world is my eyes
and I'm blind from the noise
each screech of love
of laughter
rips and annoys
and here I stand
without a scratch
my hand on the latch
about to set fire and lock myself in
and scream in the darkness
as the flames melt my skin

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MalikPeterson commented on Immolated

11-17-2009

This one is good as well man. Again you have a good flow. This one is chock full of emotion and it seems as if you are ready to let it all go...but never fear...tomorrow is another day. Nice one. May the kudos be with you. Cheers!!!

kittman101 commented on Immolated

06-29-2009

now this one is truly deep, and the emotions you send with it are very powerful. This is one of depression, and it tells how you want to lock yourself away from teh world and you are truly dieing from within.

AmadeusEx

06/29/2009

i wrote this in the midst of one of my many crises...it still holds up though, i like this one alot, and coming from another writer, i appreciate your sharpened poetic eyes as impartial judges of my work

Aaros commented on Immolated

06-28-2009

your style in this poem gets close to the rhythm of a rap. love it, plug in something to nail the emotions to the ground with a repeating hook line and you got a song here

AmadeusEx

06/28/2009

i wish i knew how to do that, sadly, im completely inept when it comes to music...glad you loved the poem though

quise commented on Immolated

06-27-2009

i looove this poem makes me think of a person in a room of glass going bizzerk cause he found out everything he ever knew as real is a lie

AmadeusEx

06/29/2009

well said quise, it kind of felt that way to me too at the time

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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