Jack and Jill


Jack and Jill

Jack and Jill went up the hill

Slowly and with purpose

Knowing as only the young do

‘Nothing will ever part us’


The brazenness of youth

Coupled with the strength of new emotions

Falsely convinces the pair

Of their invincibility through devotion


They are untouchable by Doubt

Jack and Jill so proud

Immune to Fury, Sadness, and Doom

Followers of narcissism sing loud


Of course, their fickle natures

Would never impede their fortunes

They deserve Adoration, Awe, and Glory

All in the largest portions


And when these two awaken

From their walking dream

They will also realize that effort

Is more necessary than it first seemed


They will have to labor

To maintain their blissful state

And if they choose the idle route

This love will dissipate


The value of love

Is worth the exertion

To find yourselves

An extension of the other person


Will Jill and Jack live their lives

In a continued blissful joining?

The choice is theirs, of course

Whether to respect the forces

With which they are toying


Miracles are real

And happen every day

For those who work for them

And Believe when they pray

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soulwriter commented on Jack and Jill


There are a million and one directions to go with creativity - well spoken and the thought flows... love the originality. 10 for the pictures this creates.



Thank you so much for the words of praise, Soul! It means so very much to me!

Charlie23 commented on Jack and Jill


I hope that there will be a continuance this piece. I am looking forward to learning if the two connect! Very cool poem, I enjoyed it!



Ah, now there's an idea! I've never written a continuation piece... Thanks for the idea and the encouragement. It may be time to write something new...

Rhymer commented on Jack and Jill


Hopefully they stay on top and do not fll down that hill............interesting read...................10 A. W. Nutter www.freewebs.com/abcedit



I do indeed hope they don't come tumbling down, but if they do, they will hopefully be that much wiser when making their next attempt! :)

SavVySam commented on Jack and Jill


This one definitely removes the rosy colored glasses, before presenting the sometimes harsher realities...interesting work my friend!



Thank you so much, savVy! This one was a creative writing project that turned out a little better than expected. I wanted to show the rougher side and still leave a sense of hope and I believe I may have accomplished that. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Troy commented on Jack and Jill


another one that is wonderfull . how true it is as well love must be worked on if it is to last forever



Exactly. Anything worth keeping is worth working for. Thanks for the read!

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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