June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

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June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

These walls,
The bare floor,
Wooden doors and glass windows,
This house makes not a home,
But an open prison,
Free to leave,
But no choice in returning.

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Chaos128 commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

09-16-2010

Avant garde in the house ha ha. Here I discern... a prison of the protagonist's own making. Not the happiest environment... but it's better than the unknown. People are always more comfortable with the devil they know. I am happily impressed, Brother Moon : )

RoseFromARose commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

08-23-2010

This poem leaves you feeling empty, not because the poem is empty but because the house is. The ending speaks volumes for this write. It makes you wonder why there is such freedom and yet such a hindering in that freedom. Great write.

pocketofdreams6 commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

08-09-2010

This reminds me of buying our own private cages, and not even really realizing it. Spoke great volumes, and was very impressed for as short as it was!

brokenhearted11 commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

08-08-2010

theres something about it, that i cant quite touch, but is lingering. very short, sweet and to the point. keep writing :)

shaniac commented on June 24, 2010, 10:56 PM

07-27-2010

Very powerful poem, crammed into a small space. Nicely written, keep it up!

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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