Just a Dream

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OK, not really great as a poem but it was a real dream. It's scary sometimes, the things my brain conjures up when I should be resting... I only included this because it was interesting. Well, to me anyway. :) Any dream interpreters out there, feel free to go wild on this one! Lol!

Just a Dream

Unemployed, fired repeatedly,
(That's how the dream starts out.)
The only job I can get involves taking care of old men
And their obnoxious dogs. 
The actress who reminds me of my mother
Is then kicked off a reality show.
(What is that supposed to mean?)
A long lost friend reappears
After a long soul-searching journey,
And all he's learned is how to freestyle rap to house music
While juggling bowling pins.
(Don't ask me why.)
He partnered with some friends from our high school days
And came to me because
They needed a 'Davey Jones' to be complete.
(Yes, from the Monkees.)
Then I was injured and went to a gas station for first aid.
I felt that my pain and bleeding was more important
Than the discomfort of strangers.
There followed a miscommunication,
Something derogatory that rhymed with 'Davey Jones'
(Not sure what that would even be...)
And my long lost friend retracted his friendship again.
So I was left alone
With my stooped old men
And their goofy-looking dogs.
(Did I mention that I'm a cat person?)





 

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SuSpence commented on Just a Dream

05-27-2010

Wow I really liked this one too as a fellow dreamer :) I agree with stella the parantheses really added to the poem for me as a reader, very clever. Great write as always. ~Spence

simoneaugustus

05/27/2010

Thank you so much, Spence!

Maleficent commented on Just a Dream

05-25-2010

gotta say... I'm not sure what any of that means... sometimes dreams are juz our head's way of doing a data dump, lol! ;)

simoneaugustus

05/27/2010

so true! thanks for readin' my ramblings!

Dano commented on Just a Dream

05-11-2010

dreams are can be quite entertaining.... i wouldnt know where to begin to analyze this one but it was enjoyable to read all the same

simoneaugustus

05/12/2010

Thank you so much for reading!

dahlusion commented on Just a Dream

05-11-2010

An entertaining write on the fear of nightmares and presented with delightful poetic phrasing. Bravo!!

simoneaugustus

05/12/2010

Thank you so much, dah! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

MindNumbing commented on Just a Dream

05-11-2010

This is wonderfully creative, Simone!! Your subconscious is one seriously mixed up dude, though... LOL!! But really, this was awesome... and NO, I would never try to take a stab at interpreting. Even though I want to :)

simoneaugustus

05/11/2010

I agree, my subconscious is really out there! Thanks for reading!

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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