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My very wonderful Grandmother passed away.


memories of early days
more precious now than gold
always I will treasure these
the secret things I hold

like clouds of pastel butterflies
on a gentle summer breeze
I recall with wonderment
the days of you and me

through a shimmering gossamer veil
the sunset pink and red
while stars and lights lit the night
you kissed my sleepy head

So much of you lives on in me
I wish you would have known
that the beauty that sustains me
is all the love you've shown

I remember everything
in tones of sunshine streams
haunting in their poignancy
these memories like dreams

so many magical moments
like flowers in my heart
planted by your careworn hands
still thrive though we must part

we part for only moments
though I know they'll fill my years
but whenever I remember you
I feel you dry my tears

there is no way to thank you
for loving endlessly
but I will strive to honor you
by sharing your legacy

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dragonsnap commented on Legacy


you wrote this poem with every inch of thought... each word perfect and in line with the other. Every thought you wrote in perfect rhyme and spelled a never dieing love so tender. what a great write this is.--- I loved it



thank you - I am honored by your comments. :) Be well

spbsdude commented on Legacy


A beautiful tribute that flows nicely. I love the way your poems have such a lyrical quality. I can almost hear the music that should go with this, but in fact it has a musical quality all its own. Plus it is so vividly painted with an artistic use of words and descriptions that stir the soul and gladden the heart as I can only think of those I have known who left their legacy for me.

devaamido commented on Legacy


This is such a tender loving piece that evokes nostalgic memories of my own....specifically my grandmother........d



Thanks D! Grama's are the best :)

carynontherhine commented on Legacy


Dear tenderpoison, this is absolutely beautiful. Though my Grama was of a colder nature and I did not experience this kind of love with her, I can so relate to your write when I think of my own Mother. Me and you through the years. yep, that was us. I wish you knew that the beauty that sustains me is all the love youve shown. How utterly awesome. I so enjoyed your write and hugz to you.



Thank you very much - I tried to make it something people could relate to.

HarverTomsson commented on Legacy


This poem crates a delicious ache that only meories of love soothes. Harv



Thanks Harv - That's exactly what I was trying to convey. I was able to be with her at the end - and I felt like she turned back to blow a kiss at the last moment. That was my Grama.

Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

tenderpoison’s Poems (116)

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Title Comments
You Are...I am 2
la chanson de la petite mort 4
fallen 2
seasons 0
smoke 2
Thursdays Child 2
the edge 0
whispers 2
nothing left to say... 2
sense of season 2
suspension bridge 1
Legendary 1
Almost 3
compromise 1
the final line 1
weather report 6
lessons in loss 2
Walk Away 1
b*itch boots 5
fumbling, tumbling - falling down 6
metamorphosis mine 13
Secret Language 15
An Ode to StudlyVonFiel
the ties that bind 15
spitting in the wind 9
paradigm 8
talking in tongues 10
cloudy skies 12
really 15
well, I guess I know what it's not.... 13
heart of stars 17
The Longest Road 14
Legacy 6
Despair 7
Delusion 7
Inflammatory 8
survival of the fittest 20
ephemeral 13
the fall of the inconsequenti
Modern Love 24
apathy the enemy 9
Oceans 7
Consummation 11
"I don't love you" I said 20
narcissus speaks 13
destination 9
expectations 6
worlds collide 6
afternoon delight 7
my addiction 19
spilt milk 8
bay-area tourist beware 6
reciprocal 7
take the lead 11
losing what's precious 20
figment 5
bacchus unveiled 9
genuine 24
fool's gold 13
silence speaks 9
dark temptation 10
glass beach 9
mother love 12
sweet nothing 9
lighthouse 6
unbound 8
One Moment 5
Michael Jackson is Dead 4
parley 4
unmasked 4
stand 5
sage 9
Rising 8
the last word 6
prelude to bliss 2
unstained 4
insatiable 3
not pretty 8
surrender 4
forsaken 5
kudos 5
fine dining 3
Pieces 4
the tree 16
inches 9
priceless 8
25 years 7
only a dream 9
reborn 5
flicker 5
unruffled 4
taking the air 6
cymbol song 4
strike zone 6
nine days in turlock 9
through the pale 8
redemption song 3
Wise Men Know 8
not so ancient history 7
my forefathers? 2
American Memorial 2
bitter harvest 4
unconquered 52
what's in a name? 5
Flattery 5
me and a tube of crazy glue 6
eternal vows 2
Old Friend 5
directions to destiny 4
Illumination II (a rewrite) 7
Illumination 6
submission - things they don't teach girls 22
Echo 20
Bride 16
Undone 21