Love Haiku

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    My second attempt at Haiku. Please be gentle.

    Love Haiku


    Locked in frail petals 
    Your smile ignites its blooming
    My heart, a flower
    -M. Jacobs

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    kmooney commented on Love Haiku

    03-05-2010

    Another great Haiku. You are good at these. I have several myself. They're harder than they look, wouldn't you agree? Great job...K

    danmartyjake1

    03/05/2010

    They do take a little more figuring. Not exactly writing down everything that gushes out. I have found the process of elimination helpful. TY for noticing mine and I will surely get over to your page to read more.

    ginga commented on Love Haiku

    02-28-2010

    jake, A haiku to put a springtime smile on anyone's face. ginga

    danmartyjake1

    03/01/2010

    I certainly hope it did so for you and many other readers. Thanks for your input, as always, great to hear from you. ;-)

    alreedus commented on Love Haiku

    02-27-2010

    Again. Kudos. These are great --- and addicting, no? - :-) Alan

    danmartyjake1

    02/28/2010

    Yes, I am addicted to them. How did you know? I love writing them... they are difficult and sweet all at the same time. Thanks for your support.

    kage commented on Love Haiku

    02-27-2010

    this is great also makes me want to write more haiku i have some but wont post them yet ... i like 5/4/5 this is even shorter

    danmartyjake1

    02/28/2010

    I have never tried the 5/4/5, sounds really hard, but I want to. You may have started something..TY

    knight4696 commented on Love Haiku

    02-27-2010

    Marion - To be honest, I've never been a big fan of Haiku. But the more I read - the more I like ... You capture so much in this with so few words. Very Nice! :) Ken

    danmartyjake1

    02/27/2010

    Yes, thanks. I think this one is an improvement for me. I just started trying this style. Never realizing how difficult it really is to perfect it. TY

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