Loves Gambler

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On looking into a Lover's Gambling Past.

Loves Gambler


Angled toward another room,

avoiding your glance.

Frozen in contemplation,

not allowing a chance.

 

Simple words, not explored,

found there way into my mind.

Gestures not made, stored,

fast on the edges of time.

 

Locked in repose,

hopeful not to expose.

Your stinging glare was jacked.

My system resisted being hacked.

 

Thankful, when you retired.

I rested, expiring with the setting sun.

Thoughts you flung could not rewire,

what haggard pre-course had done.

 

What jets you send along,

carried, maybe, by the throng.

Screamed on whispered lips.

Sailed on swaggered hips.

 

Found not their way into my stable.

Reached their end, but were unable.

To clabber on and fail they may,

Breach to jolt another day.

 

Since long ago, what was, was known,

and eager eyes look on and on.

Give up on wagers that you lost.

Fate does not give another toss.

 

-M. Jacobs

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knight4696 commented on Loves Gambler

02-27-2010

Marion - Very Nice! Great metaphorical write and the last stanza sums it up so well. :) Nice job! :) Ken

danmartyjake1

02/27/2010

Thanks Ken, I appreciate you checking that one out. Great hearing from you.

dragongirlie commented on Loves Gambler

02-23-2010

This piece is sexy, takes me back to recent trip to Vegas too. Nice work.

danmartyjake1

02/24/2010

I'm glad you see the sexy side of it. Thanks for reading it nad commenting on it too.

MarionYost commented on Loves Gambler

02-16-2010

Love the last stanza, Nice flow.. Good Job :) All the best -Marion-

danmartyjake1

02/17/2010

Thanks, Marion for reading" Loves Gambler" and your comments.I would be interested in your perspective on some of my older poetry, such as "Hearth" or "Carriage".

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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