Moving Inexorably Further Behind

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    this is about the world people choose to live in, the world that is killing them...so afraid to leave behind cable tv, chained to the miserable convenience of modern living

    Moving Inexorably Further Behind

    faces of people
    we see only briefly
    hardly enough
    to fill in the cavity

    stressful morning
    drifting through smog
    armored against
    any attempt to touch God

    the sunlight is trapped
    behind the mountains of my mind
    the key clicks shut
    the door to my crime

    ravished to the point
    of failure i climb
    into the land
    of fortunes decline

    a drug i realize
    someone must clasp
    and render
    into my grasp

    a smoky unearthly haze
    of tainted money
    and simple greed
    no spark of humanity

    tasteless steaks
    drenched in corn syrup
    battered and dipped
    grow like a polyp

    slender avenues
    hide the skyless views
    another successful day
    selling rainbows

    islands of glass
    trapped within
    shouting at  nothing
    wreathed in sin

    people are not angels
    demons are not men
    women are devoted
    to men who cannot win

    forget about the future
    wallow in the past
    dreams are dangerous
    habits to possess

    images in the mirror
    are closer
    than they
    appear

    in case
    of emergency
    break glass
    ...


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    SavVySam commented on Moving Inexorably Further Behind

    01-18-2010

    Hello~ It has been a while since I stopped by to read. Wow..very nice work here! "islands of glass" "land of fortunes decline" sharp lines and images convey intent clearly! I like it a lot!
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    danmartyjake1 commented on Moving Inexorably Further Behind

    12-10-2009

    I love this one, so much. It has a taste of everything we all have grown acustom to and what makes us wrench at the same time. It was designed beautifully and reaches it's goal. Thanks for sharing a piece of your soul. 10!
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    AmadeusEx

    12/10/2009

    i grew up worshipping movies like jeremiah johnson and anything starring clint eastwood or paul newman...rugged individualist's, and i just see our society moving away from that, and it saddens me

    dahlusion commented on Moving Inexorably Further Behind

    12-10-2009

    My friend, this profound write tells me that you are in need of the forest or the coast or the mountains or the rivers, a desire to bring spirit back to nature, to our wounded mother, to heal with her; a desire for solitude, meditation, trance, deep breathing and motionless relaxation. The city's "modern iceberg" is an inner-spiritual-freeze, and most people have no idea that this is happening to them. "slender avenues hide the sky-less views" — this line speaks volumes of your frustrations and desires, spiritual needs and wants. Lovely!!
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    MalikPeterson commented on Moving Inexorably Further Behind

    12-09-2009

    people are not angels demons are not men women are devoted to men who cannot win That is a perfect summation of some of society's woes. I agree that sometimes we are so sucked in that we forget to just sit back and admire the world in front of us and desire something more than the same old smoke and mirrors. But...hey...a drone wont moan if you enslave it...lol see how my old works with your new? Good one here man really...I enjoyed it. Your message speaks for itself. May the kudos be with you...cheers!!!
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    stellar commented on Moving Inexorably Further Behind

    12-09-2009

    Sometimes we forget the beauty of the earth when we are to immersed in this modern world...We lost some humanity of us if we conform to much, we are not robots...Sometimes we must break free,,,break free from illusion...great imagery...I'm carried away by this writing...Great write...^_^ v
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    AmadeusEx

    12/09/2009

    this poem started with a simple phrase i heard on tv, faces of people we see only briefly...it built from there...im glad you enjoyed it, thank you for reading my works

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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