My Death Will Rise

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musing on death, something i cant forget about

My Death Will Rise





my death will rise from the river
gnashing fangs of putridity
scaled horror of the deep
a monster in my sleep
to harrow and forsake me
melt the marrow from my bones
stake my heart and rape me
within my essence lies a spirit
a web of illusion
an unsolid state of trust
that i must dust with fervor
or my death will flow like a tumor
deep in my lungs
filling up my flesh caverns
and smothering my tongue
i will not shout, nor cry for help
my death is here to take me out
away from this world
and its optical delusions
my river demon of bloodless confusions
the death that awaits, abides, and decides
ready or not
i can either laugh or hide
face his visage with worldly eyes
and let the blood drip from what lies
indeed, proceed
as dust before me
as clouds in the sky,
satan cannot take what lives inside

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bforibus commented on My Death Will Rise

07-12-2009

very dark but inspirational poem. indeed a great write. one of the better ones i have read tonight. not only for its uniqueness but its flow as well. great job

passionsdance commented on My Death Will Rise

07-12-2009

this is yet another of your wonderful works. I like it , here were so many great lines that jus awed me ... as always ... I love your work .

Artie commented on My Death Will Rise

07-12-2009

Excellent!!!!!!! This got my attention big time!!! This flows so smooth, and the message is so strong and clear. That's it!!! I can't read anymore today!! An absolute 10 from me.

AmadeusEx

07/12/2009

thank you artie, that means alot, makes me think i might actually have a talent at this

lustfulsoul commented on My Death Will Rise

07-11-2009

"let the blood drip from what lies indeed, proceed as dust before me as clouds in the sky, satan cannot take what lives inside" You are incredibly talented. I love this dark piece! Great job!

AmadeusEx

07/12/2009

thank you lustful, remember me for later, read some of my older more recent stuff, i think you would really enjoy atlas and pandora, and rainbow warrior, maybe bones of the clown as well...i have alot so pick whatever you wish

Minerva22 commented on My Death Will Rise

07-10-2009

Wow...deep, and very Poeish, and demonic. But I see that the real message here is resiliance...better to die fighting than go out with a whimper so to speak. Nice.

AmadeusEx

07/10/2009

definitely, resilience...dont fear the unknown basically, because its never as bad you thought it would be

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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