My Demented Decline


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draw your own conclusions

My Demented Decline

can you guess,
this happiness is not forever,
this love we have is short-lived
like waking up with fever,
my eyes have never been clearer,
but when you draw nearer....the fear i feel,
overwhelmed by your touch and your smell,
the closeness is cloying,
it stinks of warmth and love,
i want to shove you away,
you torture me with promises and understanding,
you hang yourself by admitting,
that you love me,
care enough to accept,
to dwell,
to die, to lie side by side in death,
to extend this moment into eternity,
a burial at sea of viking immortality,
like valhalla you burn in your lies,
i cant believe you,
you deny,
you try and try
but i think im too far gone to be worth it in the end,
your truth is just pretend,
this everlasting will end,
i cant shake the demons from my mind
and i cant defend
my demented decline

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scrye commented on My Demented Decline


amad another really great poem i am fast becoming a fan of your site. Great work, keep writing I love reading it

tenderpoison commented on My Demented Decline


once burned, twice shy....I have this theory that we can only ever give our whole hearts once...after that it's just the broken pieces. I guess people call it "luggage"....but the truth is that hearts just don't heal so well, and even when they do the scars remain.

poet4dasoul commented on My Demented Decline


Wow, if this isn't the intermingling of most ppls lives; then I don't know what is. I guess hanging in there and battling it out is really an illusion; because the foundation is faulty. This is an unnerving piece and I can appreciate it; simply because it knocks down the charade. thanks for that one poet.



thank you poet, if you can, id love a comment on my newest, Tree

latinangel commented on My Demented Decline


Wolfie after a recent chat we had I think I know where this is coming from of course I could be wrong and you did say that we should draw our own conclusions so I have. I am always attracted by the rhythm of your poems. They have a great flow to them just like song lyrics. I love the line your truth is just pretend. Great poem here wolfie. I am going to read and comment on some of your others and I am posting a couple of new ones too. This one gets a ten. Latin Angel

Minerva22 commented on My Demented Decline


would it be lame if I said, can't fight the love? But I understand where you're coming from. We want to trust people but when they give us that doubt are defenses are on lock and ready.



hey minerva, check out my newest poem, Tree,when you get the chance, thanks

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