My journey

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    My journey
    Found myself in places never seen before
    Tempted by some feeling that I don't want no more
    Surrounded by these people that I hesitate to trust
    Just ain't seen nobody that I want to touch
    I tried to talk to one man who I thought would see my pain
    Found out that I wasted time cause all he want was gain
    Placed myself in God's hands determined to be free
    Gave up on my own strength which always did fail me
    Heard about a man named Jesus can't believe a line
    He healed the sick and raised the dead and saved a friend of mine














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    bigpill commented on My journey

    11-19-2009

    There is a rhythmic bounce to this that makes for easy reading, yet; the message come through clearly. Hello friend!
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    christliked

    11/19/2009

    thank you

    themommyof2 commented on My journey

    10-29-2009

    I really liked that one. It is hard during those times when you put your trust in someone only to find out they are not who you thought they were. Great feeling to your writing.
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    christliked

    11/05/2009

    I loved to read before I loved to write and some very good stories guide my pen thank you for the ad

    nbosko commented on My journey

    10-02-2009

    I love this poem..you have a great talent...I am glad that Jesus saved your friend for you where he didn't for my mother...keep up the good work hun..you are very very talented...and thankyou for this poem..it could give people a lot of insight!
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    jkl1027 commented on My journey

    10-01-2009

    I loved the way this work ends because it hangs. I mean it gives an implied response from the persona's struggle and conflict. The exposition establishes the experience that the persona encountered which was why the persona 'resolved' place his trust in the Almighty, but towards the end there's a new unfolding of what happens next in which the reader is ought to conclude for himself. The last 2 lines best exemplifies how this poem ties it all: the persona doubts the power of Being but in the last line enumerates all the ppower that Being can do.
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    Worthless commented on My journey

    09-29-2009

    Well written... But are you gay? or are you talking about trusting a friend who betrayed you?
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    christliked

    09/29/2009

    This is the best respones that I have ever received because it made you think and assume even thou you were wrong I am not gay but it makes me think that you are or maybe you were tempted.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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