My World Full of Rhyme

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  • Dreamer123
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Poem Commentary

The first verse doesn't rhyme but then it starts to flow.  And the reason why I made this type of poem was to show beat, rhythm and rhyme. It's pretty random but I like the flow.

My World Full of Rhyme

You chose your path,
I chose mine,
you aren't stepping in my way,
cause I'm independent,
I chose the path on my right,
keeping on track,
some others get lost.

My world might be full of fantasies,
But I come back to reality,
My mind full of melodies,
Have you seen my "Billie Jeans"?

Roses and daises is what I see,
you can't tell me what to be,
so I keep on with my life,
can't mess with a price,
so chose wisely,
before you start fighting.

This isn't a place for gloom,
look at my blossoms how they bloom,
this mind of imagination,
would you at least show some appreciation?

My dreams are as high towards the sky,
so let me fly,
don't judge a books by it's cover,
that might be your lover,
in our dreams anything can happen,
as long as your still rappin'.

:)

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dawnjyc commented on My World Full of Rhyme

12-13-2009

Are you really only 13? This is above and beyond some of the most seasoned poets I know. Keep on your path and don't lose your way. This poem is very inspirational.

Dreamer123

02/07/2010

Thanks This was a random poem :) even though it didn't rhyme XD thanks alot God Bless

dahlusion commented on My World Full of Rhyme

09-30-2009

Beautifully laid-out freedom in this perfectly created poem!

Dreamer123

10/02/2009

Thank you! Thank you very much :D God Bless

jesusfreake commented on My World Full of Rhyme

09-21-2009

you are without a doubt the most awesome 13-year-old poet i have ever met and u truly inspire me....ur talent is radiant in this poem!!

Dreamer123

09/22/2009

awww thanks i just wrote something random and i just put up a wierd title I'll try to get new poems as fast as I can thanks so much for stopping by and to comment :D

PenofDarkness commented on My World Full of Rhyme

09-15-2009

Cool words and rhymes "sister from another mister"! I can't believe you're only 13? Man, if that's true--you'll be a star for sure one day; maybe sooner than later!!! If you read any of my stuff on this site, you'll see only my poetry. I also write lyrics. I was in a band for years and wrote most of the lyrics (I play the drums). But, on this site I am keeping my poetry separate from my musical lyrics...for now anyways. But hey, I love your wording and don't worry if some parts don't rhyme. It's all good!!!

Dreamer123

09/18/2009

yeah thanks for everything thanks for your time and comments God bless you

dragonfly1023 commented on My World Full of Rhyme

08-09-2009

very inspiring thoughts that show your path is a good one Dreamer123. love your optimisim re life. your wisdom is well beyond youe years. keep up the excellent work :D

Dreamer123

08/10/2009

Thanks dragonfly1023!! You rock for that. Your also an amazing poet. I love your poetry because they show a special emotion on each and everyone of them. thanks for the comment and your time. thanks for your help. God Bless. :D

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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