Odium

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    Odium

       

           You say that you hurt...You say you bleed..
                  But it's an addiction that you feed-
        
            Dwelling in rails of denial..while misery 
                    hides behind your smile...

                You've  brought on a new you..
                       putred, undevoted and patheticaly askew-

               To think -you were someone I held true..
                     now a traitor to everything we grew-

               Burning rush consumes you in..
                      never to know where to begin-

                 What used to be your condescending glee..
                      life has folded over you -
                           ignoring your faint pleas....

                 Now what you crave and desire most...
                                      is to be free

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    lightcourier commented on Odium

    06-23-2009

    Nice work. Very cryptically placed. Freedom is always such a complex promise when the personal baggage weighs you down. Nice work. Thanks!
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    Amare13

    06/29/2009

    Thanx so much for reading my stuff..I appreciate it..Amare

    dahlusion commented on Odium

    06-04-2009

    A perfect poetic scream: screaming truth, pain, and lost love, with all of the creative forces behind you.
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    Amare13

    06/13/2009

    Thanx so much for the comment!!

    HarverTomsson commented on Odium

    06-04-2009

    Here is the poem that works! This one says it sooo much more powerfully than Sinister Vortex. This one is a ten!
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    Amare13

    06/13/2009

    Thanx so much for your comment!! Much appreciated indeed..Amare

    StandingBear commented on Odium

    06-01-2009

    It's great a heavy burden has left you after writing this special poem. "Sting" sang it best .. "If you love someone set them free" *________* Great write. 10
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    Amare13

    06/13/2009

    Thanx so much for the lovely comments..Amare

    Hampton commented on Odium

    05-27-2009

    Very nice poem. "Now what you crave and desire most is to be free" is a great ending for the poetic journey provided by a very good poet
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    Amare13

    06/13/2009

    Thanx so much for the comments!!Talk to ya soon!! Amare

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