Our Dance

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  • Lost Love

    Our Dance

    Our Dance
    Ever since i first looked into your eyes i dreamed of how you would look in my arms so tight. I heard about your league and mine being opposite ends of the spectrum though i was tempted to fight. You were as close to love as ive ever seen and i began to wonder if you were true. It became aparent that id seen it as a miracle how god had made you. Our dance happened one saturday in mid February when i was 17. You looked more beautiful than any woman i had ever seen. Your red hair blew in the breeze as i looked into your eyes. Suddenly taking up all the courage i had in me i asked you to the prom because my love for you i could no longer disguise. Miraculously you said yes and suddenly i felt like a success for the first time in my life. I suddenly began to let the world around me know that i was going with you with thoughts of you being my wife. My dreams were set aside when your family could not pay for a dress. Although you said that you wanted to date sometime a little later which relieved my stress. Our date i tried to make wonderful if i can. To be my girlfriend i would ask yo at the end of the night and i continued as i planned. You rejected me and i got depressed again refusing to eat. that was the first time i asked you to be mine but it woulnd never be the last. This was one of the things that i am not so proud of that was in my past. I was obsessed with the thought of dating you and marrying you until that dreadful day. It was the day i finally realized that you would never love me and wanted me to go away. I hated you for months afterwords for killing my dreams. My happiness was over or as though it seems. Those who know me best know i never quite got over you. You have your own life and family and dreams now as well as your own dreams

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    am2anangel commented on Our Dance

    08-30-2009

    Again great job dan. I do however agree with kristy that the end was slightly off. you kind of repeat that she has her own dreams. let me throw a thought at you; How does this sound; you have your own life, family and dreams of which my being part of does not include. A little aquiredly put, but you get the idea.

    lucky62 commented on Our Dance

    08-30-2009

    lost love is the most dreadful regret there is hold your head high for there will be another.........

    KristyLoren commented on Our Dance

    08-29-2009

    This is a beautiful thought provoking piece of art. You have great rhyme in alot of places. Such love this person missed out on, very sad. I enjoyed your descriptions and lyrics. The ending for me was just a bit off. But who am I. It is YOUR beautiful writing. No bullshit, I can see you have a great talent here. I would like to read more of your work. Overall GREAT piece. Keep writing.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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