Promise

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    Promise
    I promise that you're my everything

    I promise that I am yours to keep

    I promise to always take care of you

    I promise to always care

    I promise to never leave you

    I promise to always be there

    I promise to never hurt you

    I promise to always make things better

    I promise to always love you

    I promise to always show it

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    Kirstin commented on Promise

    06-26-2009

    try rearranging the lines. like connsk8 says, it ends rather abruptly. you could always put the lines in order of length or of meaning. or alternate the ones that end with you so that its every other one or something.
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    connsk8 commented on Promise

    06-11-2009

    I like this, I just think it ends rather abrubtly, but the thought behind it is nice, I think you could work on the flow and the rhyming too but that's my style. maybe not yours, keep working on it though, you have a nice passion and sensitivity, true workings of a poet...
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    Flamedancer commented on Promise

    11-30-2008

    I read it like it was somebodys wedding vows
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    ivecute77 commented on Promise

    11-19-2008

    was ok
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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