"The Maniac Part 5"

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    This poem is the tragic ending of the beloved and feared character i have created. I hope you enjoyed my poems and i hope you continue to enjoy my poems for years to come.

    I love feedback so let me know what you think
    Well i hope you enjoyed reading  this poem as much as i enjoyed writing it.

    Your friend and fellow poet
    Grim

    "The Maniac Part 5"

    "The Maniac Part 5"
    "His Life"

    Trapped in a vortex of uncertainty
    The hate he feels is only out weighed by the pain
    He has no control of his own self image
    For the voice tells him what to do and say
    His mind is so twisted into it's self
    That conversations with these thoughts have become regular
    As he sits alone in his dark room
    Slipping even further away from sanity
    ...He says...

    ...I'll make you pay...
    (in a strong voice)

    ...I'll make you pay...
    (in a fading voice)

    ...I'll make you pay...
    (in a weak voice)

    ........There was a slight pause........
    and in a slight whisper you could barley hear him say

    ...for all my suffering...

    "Then he laughs silently as he puts the gun to his head
    and pulls the trigger"

    A poem By:TheAngelOfDeath

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    melanie23 commented on "The Maniac Part 5"

    08-26-2009

    ouch. well done. where do u come up with this stuff?
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    FiloRozzell commented on "The Maniac Part 5"

    07-29-2009

    now should it end, or is there more I must go on...You really went out there with this series...
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    wheelsal commented on "The Maniac Part 5"

    07-24-2009

    Now how can there be a part 6? Sally.....................
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    TheAngelOfDeath

    07/24/2009

    Ahh But there will be!

    TheAngelOfDeath

    07/24/2009

    I am writing part 6 as we speak. I have a very good twist to the WHOLE story line if you are familar with it. You will See you find out even more about his life and who he was...(or what really happend to his mom) Just a little peice that ive been saving lol ) later hope you enjoyed and be sure to keep checking in so you see part 6 when i post it. LATER

    papapaczki commented on "The Maniac Part 5"

    07-24-2009

    Woah, didn't see that ending coming! the poor maniac, or is that a metaphor? Part 6??
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    beautifuldeath commented on "The Maniac Part 5"

    07-24-2009

    well now, what an ending!! I really enjoyed this whole series. you outdid yourself. loved it. 10 from me
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    TheAngelOfDeath

    07/24/2009

    It inst over Beautiful... lol :)

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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