what inauspicious star
ruled the heavens
in the hour of my birth

what unfortunate celestial configuration
caused itself to form
in the hour of my birth

what unholy witch
tossed the bloody bones high
in the hour of my birth

what blinded seer
wrote such hopeless prophecy
in the hour of my birth

where is the gypsy
whose glass dimmed
in the hour of my birth

did all-knowing God
wear a mournful frown
in the hour of my birth

did all foretell
such futile, pain-wracked future
in the hour of my birth

no, I'll not believe
ill-omened destiny seen
in the hour of my birth

I will look to the heavens
to claim free-will not seen
in the hour of my birth

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captaininsight commented on reborn


Mystical, visually overwhelming, arising from the bog on a darkend night. It made me look up in desperate defiance, clench my fist , and challenged my breath. Nice.

soulwriter commented on reborn


The structure sets a tone of melancholy tragedy, repetitive in structure to create a foundation that allows for mortal questioning of life's beginning - and in your ending you seek a baptism of self reflective redemption.. Great job, keep on expressing.

Jay690P commented on reborn


Wonderful poem, wonderfully organized and wrenching in its effect; at my age I wish that you, at your age, had more to be happy about.

HarverTomsson commented on reborn


I note with appreciation the use of the triplet, and the use of repetition for skeletal structure in the argument for determinism. Great dramatic turning, then, to its ultimate disavowal.

optimistic commented on reborn


so many mixed thoughts in this poem you have a lot of great styles of writing this is truly a good one no one know what happen next after we are born. Excellent

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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