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    • catarino
    • Cultures come to conquer and their gods applaud.

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    i've
    tried re-writing my life
    against your skin,
    and
    deep within your bones,
    the only thoughts
    are
    cold, slow/aloneness.

    shifted
    from your side,
    behind you i've disguised
    your thighs w/sweaty hurt hold
    and i've tried to lie,

    but
    always in
    our
    blood is truth.

    pulling out
    and far away
    from you-
    i'll never lose
    the misuse of our
    feelings.

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    WordSlinger commented on Revision

    08-24-2010

    Pretty cool, only a true man to himself can feel and write like this, ty WS
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    RymaHouri commented on Revision

    01-22-2009

    wow a frank poem i like it
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    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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