She Surely Don't

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A song about myself. Accusation. In a nut shell. Follow me on Buzznet? PM for the link. Its a public diary. My words.

She Surely Don't

Love songs on the radio.
That sweetheart lies in bed.
She's hoping that you meant,
everything you ever said.

But you surely don't,
because she surely doesn't.
Everything that was, everything that was,
that wasn't.

She wants proof.
That her days will be alright.
That her paranoid thoughts,
won't kill her in the night.

She hears your every breath,
but has no clue who you are.
Your many glass facades,
make you a stranger in the dark.

But you surely don't,
because she surely doesn't.
Everything that was, everything that was,
that wasn't.

She walks along,
a cracked cement path,
filled with memories,
of a bittersweet past.

Was it insecure lies,
or unfulfilled promise?
The swears thought up at night?
the feeling of her kiss?

But you surely don't,
because she surely doesn't.
Everything that was, everything that was,
that wasn't.

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DeepEclipse commented on She Surely Don't

07-29-2010

Songlike quality. You do have a uniqueness to your poems. They hold strong undertones. Part of the journey seems to be to decipher what your visuals describe. Excercises the mind of the reader. I dig that. One line - (She walks along, a cracked cement path,) - came to me as something that once was solid but lost its firm hold? Like her trust in him, maybe. Could be wrong. Good emotinal read.

AlysonAlive

07/29/2010

Very correct. ^.^ I never write poems that someone can simply read and connect to or understand right away. And yes, the path; in all reality people have ruined my trust in them. Constant usage of me, backstabbing and lies. And I remember when we were young and the cement path ITSELF was strong. I find myself feeling the path is me. Being walked on; in a sense. ;D

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