Some Haiku for You!

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Haiku is an interesting form in that yu are limited to a total of 17 syllables, but can paint a picture, tell a joke, or tell a story. I have done a little of each here...Enjoy!!!!

Some Haiku for You!

 when deep sea diving
when I have run out of air
people point and laugh


love is a flower
petals fall as we grow old
to sprout life anew


a phrase and a kiss
rings and flowers and dancing
forever with you


pass the salt to me
the season of seasoning
has passed by this steak!


starting as two ones
meet, laugh, kiss, love, ask, accept
two ones become one


park on a driveway?
drive madly on a parkway?
sit on my butt.


BAM! BOOM! POW! BIFF! BANG!
It's onomatopoeia!
it's just fun to say!


a black sky looming
a blacker car arriving
down, down, down, with tears


the end is coming
just a dire warning for you
but all good things must...

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janetdawson commented on Some Haiku for You!

03-26-2011

I think you gave us all something to think about . Great Job Dan

pocketofdreams6 commented on Some Haiku for You!

03-22-2010

That was actually a very deep haiku... I loved the odd transformation of signatures!

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

dangedmanjr’s Poems (25)

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Unrequited 1
Some Haiku for You! 2
Landslide 8
almost reality 3
Closed Eyes, Open Heart (UPA Pic challenge) 16
Arithmea 12
from the ground up 38
His, Hers, Their's 7
Mr. Mom 29
climax of a kiss 13
A prayer... 11
the time is now 11
the time has come 7
the thin line between 3
no more 2
rage 7
I can't... 4
blurred clarity 6
incoherent ramblings of a madman 2
in the wind 3
psycho dicotomy 10
the lone rider 4
Ten minutes...ete
rnity
12
Slow.time.fas
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5
Dream scape 8