Something Preserved

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    I saw a bunny attacked by another animal.

    Something Preserved

    Something Preserved

     

    Something obscured, masked and drawn within

    Something withheld, something burning

    Words lost on a silent tongue

    Ancient knowing unsung

    Violent throws and actions split

    Quiet droning, waiting, unsent

    Panting, growling, the fiery dog stays

    In wait, hopeless prey knows his fate

     

    -Marian Jacobs

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    brokenhearted11 commented on Something Preserved

    01-14-2011

    this is gonna be a random comment thats not that great, as i have little to say on this poem other than that i enjoyed it and im glad i read it, so good job, keep writing! haha did you like my random comment? 10

    danmartyjake1

    01/14/2011

    Ok-Thanks for reading it. i appreciate your response.

    knight4696 commented on Something Preserved

    03-12-2010

    Such is the Circle of Life - Nature can be both beautiful and brutal ... much like life, Very nice job! :) Ken

    danmartyjake1

    03/13/2010

    Ken, Thanks for reading "Something Preserved", a more unrecognized poem of mine. I appreciate you checking it out. You summed it perfectly. ;-)

    dahlusion commented on Something Preserved

    02-04-2010

    Lovely! Your words create such vivid imagery, almost as if dreaming, or a trance, or even a nightmare. Powerful!

    danmartyjake1

    02/05/2010

    Dah, Thanks for finding "Something Preserved ", which didn't get much attention. I appreciate you noticing it, as always, we resonate so much with each other's descriptions, feelings and emotions. Thanks for validating it by simply understanding it. I have been so busy lately, haven't been able to write or get on OP that much. I will be back, though, soon, please drop me a line anytime. I will be sure to stop by your page.

    LGDisturb commented on Something Preserved

    12-31-2009

    i chose this one to read because you had no comments for it. i must say, it is very articulate. vivid imaging allows a sort of, "knowing the backstory". it brings out the underlying hunger of a predator and the pure helplessness of a caught prey. VERY very well written. if all the rest are as good as this one, i will definetely continue to read. thank you for the comment on "DROP"...favor returned. :D Fellow Poet, LGDisturb

    danmartyjake1

    01/02/2010

    Many Thanks, for your candid comments on this one. I appreciate your response to it. I am not sure what you will think of the rest of them, but I am always interested and grateful for your perspective, to be sure.

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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