strike zone


strike zone

implacable and merciless
your condemnation falls
upon my unprotected head
a tangible weight
I seem to carry it the extra mile
like conscripted Roman citizens
stuck carrying your baggage
drafted, coerced
press-ganged into service
endlessly gratifying
your vapid hunger for
domineered, engineered validation
tight, the grasp of a benevolent dictator
on my personal liberties
you love me, you say
as though I've not yet understood
recognized your love is a tool
a weapon of mass manipulation
so, what's new? maybe...
that I have no more strike zone
so fire away
make it a kill shot
you can bury me here
under the weight
of your damaged luggage
my head stone
how apropos

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ginga commented on strike zone


This is like voltage running through. WOW! The similes are outstanding. The rancor in this poem is impeccable. Keep on posting. Ginga

slohan4u commented on strike zone


i really like this one. makes me think. thoughts and words fit and flow well(rest of my 100 characters.......................................)

connsk8 commented on strike zone


I had to read this twice to appreciate the full effect of it, I can only say, your pen name should be Tender "passion" instead of Tender "poison" because although the subject matter may not be pleasant, there is such passion in your writing...I would love to see what you can do with something pleasant!!!



P.S. A sweet, "ten" der from me!!

StandingBear commented on strike zone


Relationships can begin so pleasant and end the opposite. It is those that weather the storms whom will in the end be loved and appreciated. Great write. 10

castlemist commented on strike zone


Wow, that's powerful. I love the feel of this poem. To be able to encapsulate such feeling with a economy of words takes talent. Good Job. Jerry

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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sense of season 2
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the final line 1
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Secret Language 15
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paradigm 8
talking in tongues 10
cloudy skies 12
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heart of stars 17
The Longest Road 14
Legacy 6
Despair 7
Delusion 7
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Oceans 7
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destination 9
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spilt milk 8
bay-area tourist beware 6
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genuine 24
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dark temptation 10
glass beach 9
mother love 12
sweet nothing 9
lighthouse 6
unbound 8
One Moment 5
Michael Jackson is Dead 4
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unmasked 4
stand 5
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Rising 8
the last word 6
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unstained 4
insatiable 3
not pretty 8
surrender 4
forsaken 5
kudos 5
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Pieces 4
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priceless 8
25 years 7
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flicker 5
unruffled 4
taking the air 6
cymbol song 4
strike zone 6
nine days in turlock 9
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American Memorial 2
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Flattery 5
me and a tube of crazy glue 6
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Illumination 6
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Echo 20
Bride 16
Undone 21