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This was written during a very dark time in my life


I can’t do this.

I can’t do it anymore.

I can not be strong.

I can’t even stand up.

Not for me, and certainly not for

Anyone else.


But everyone wants me to be strong.

I can not.


In order to survive this time in my life,

Physically and emotionally,

I need to give up.


Whatever happens, happens.

Regardless of whether

I’m strong, weak, or indifferent.

I’m choosing to be indifferent.



Losing my love life?


Becoming numb to situations that demand effort?


Losing my loved ones?

So what?

Becoming financially handicapped,

Feeling only bitterness and frustration,

Forsaking small pleasures

That once made all the difference?

Who cares?

I don’t.

I can’t anymore.

If I do, I will break.


So walk all over me,

Kick me while I’m down,

Destroy all I’ve cared for in the world,

Leave me lonely and bitter,

But don’t you DARE ask me to care while it’s happening.

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HarverTomsson commented on Surrender


I won't 'cause I won't have to. You already care, and that's why you've taken the one strategy to keep sane that's left. And the fact you write, is from hope that someone can and will care enough for two.



You seem to understand so much more than simply the words I've written. Thank you for that understanding and validation. It means so much to me to know someone understood everything between the lines as well.

chattycathy commented on Surrender


Heartfelt, emotional, open, truthful... Thank you.

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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