the not so immaculate

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the not so immaculate

on the eve of mans dawn
angels flittered about with calm
sensing change that was needed
warnings flared but never heeded
will their be joy in their life
or will it be filled with strife
as i see the angels flight
wings spread afar under the moon's light
as the shadows grow across the land
witnessing the dawn of man
the angel's hope begins to bloom
shedding light through out the gloom
and then with thunderous roar
mans destiny sealed forever more
immaculate, not so it seems
exceeding man's wildest dreams
spirits soar in the hours to come
and never shall this be undone
to live their shame for eternity
to play their game for all to see

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lastyl commented on the not so immaculate

07-16-2010

once again, brilliant, i love reading your work!! I look forward to reading more.

gregster commented on the not so immaculate

05-11-2010

you are indeed a great poem i lie your work........awesome

SuSpence commented on the not so immaculate

04-27-2010

It turned out awesome! I love that poetry writer concept. -Spence

Dano commented on the not so immaculate

04-22-2010

a great poem from start to finish... nicely written

Artie commented on the not so immaculate

04-22-2010

I really like this piece!! The story is so compelling - I want more - 10 from me

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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