The Place Where You Left Me

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  • Mayuna
  • Anata wa Naraku no hana ja nai ~ You are not a flower of Hell

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This is just a ramble, take what you will from it. Interesting what comes about when you write whatever comes to mind.

The Place Where You Left Me

Yes, yes come in, come in
For it is you I have waited here for
This place it is dark and yes it is dank
But it is for you that I stayed

Don't you recall this place with no light?
You brought me here first to the eternal night
Why do you come to me so sad and depressed
When I am so glad that at last you have arrived

Are you comfortable, shall I pour you a drink
My apologies dear friend but the wine has no taste
The food is quite bland and smells quite foul
But never the less you are here to ease my sorrow

If you care take a seat, yes sit, sit
The furniture is quite dusty as you can see
You were the last to sit there
It seems like now that was an eternity

You did not come to visit you say?  
Then what exactly was your intent?
Why come here when all you wanted to do was leave?
.................

So that is it
You came to say good-bye
When all I have done is live for you
The memory of us and what could be's

Yes my friend, I understand
You could never truly love me
We are too different but can't you see we are the same?
Wait, oh wait your eyes they have changed!

I remember such melancholy hidden deep in your soul
Self loathing and pity burdened your steps
Making your youthful features appear old
I can see you have regained your lost light

Is that why you left me behind?  
To better yourself while I held you back
I suppose it is time to set you free
And pray, pray, pray that once again you will come back to me
 

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Sx9 commented on The Place Where You Left Me

11-20-2010

YES HE CAME BACK TO LEAVE,,BUT WHY,FOR WE ALREADY KNOW,THAT MAKE NO SENSE TO UN LOOKERS,SO WAS IT LOVE,CARE OR JUST TO RUB IT IN,CREATING NEW PAIN THAT WILL SCAR FOR LIFE,,LOVE YOUR DILIGENCE...

Springsize commented on The Place Where You Left Me

10-06-2010

I read this poem as heartfelt, you give so much, and the most is in loyalty... and you described in meticulous detail, the experience of love leaving twice... where you are waiting, almost in a suspended animation... with so much passion...

GUSTY commented on The Place Where You Left Me

10-05-2010

OH, MY DEAR, I LOVE THIS WORK OF YOURS. IT SOUND SO REAL! HOW MANY TIMES DON'T WE WITNESS SCENES OF SAD SEPARATIONS IN OUR WORLD? I LIKE POEMS THAT FLOW NATURALLY, AND YOURS IS ONE! BRAVO!!!

Forestbird commented on The Place Where You Left Me

10-05-2010

Very good and meaningfull writing. It is a short story or ballad and it is a lot between the lines

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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