The Third Star

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    The Third Star

    Autumn fog dims light
    Perched against the dead of night
    Are the stars pale bright

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    BCP commented on The Third Star

    08-09-2009

    MIRIAM, YES YOU HAVE WRITTEN A HAIKU WHICH IS WHAT I FO SOMETIMES TO. I MEAN THAT I ALL THERE IS TO SAY. LOVE TO WORK WITHYOU DEAR ONE. BRENDA YOU HAVE A GIFTED TALENT, JUST NEEDS SOME GUIDES. BRENDA

    RHPeat commented on The Third Star

    07-17-2009

    Haiku syllable count. Seasonal change word in Autumn fog, a strong haiku Interesting Oxymoron on the ending as well (pale bright) it gives dimness yet it offers a sparkling feeling. time passing into renewal. The image as a whole is like a snapshot which is complete for the Haiku form. Nice poem Miriam. A poet friend// RH Peat

    Hanna commented on The Third Star

    06-29-2009

    isn't this a haiku? It is meant to be short-only 17 syllables in fact! This was very well done and excellent in form.

    d2wice commented on The Third Star

    06-28-2009

    short. intresting but you need to establish better what you are righting about.

    Lucho commented on The Third Star

    06-26-2009

    I like it. Short sweet and to the point. Keep it up

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