This Daughter of Ours

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    this about a father, a mother, and a daughter, and a day in the life

    This Daughter of Ours

    small in stature
    she uses a ladder
    cleverly i might add
    for a girl of only four and a half
    the cookie jar on the top of the refrigerator
    her mother and father underrate her
    intelligence is tall
    and climbs mighty mountains
    and cookies crumble sedately
    into milk filled glasses
    as afternoon slowly passes
    into a quenchable sky
    this daughter of ours
    is the reason and my why 
    for every morning drive and hassle filled week
    i think of her first word
    or how she shyly peeked out
    from beneath a blanket
    as i offered her a carefully bought trinket
    of my love and affection
    for this wonderful reflection
    of everything i am
    and all that i love
    this little girl who opened the door
    to a heaven above
    to this unbeliever and his faithless history
    all falls away
    as she sleeps sleepily
    sucking at a thumb
    as if she had a plumb too sweet
    to finish eating
    and i know in the morning
    ill only think of one thing
    that beautiful little girl
    and her journey into becoming something
    so pure and true
    and hard and strong
    i must make sure
    to help her along

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    Stardrift commented on This Daughter of Ours

    09-06-2009

    Sensitive write. And it's only a cookie jar here - many parents underestimate a child's resourcefulness, and thereby, home safety. The cookie jar is often chemicals, lighters, etc. This one was more at ease for a change, a break from your standard high-architecture discourses. Innocent write! Tizzle-en!!

    AmadeusEx

    09/07/2009

    thank you drift, this was meant to be a lighter one, but its time for me to delve deep again

    CMarsh commented on This Daughter of Ours

    08-31-2009

    Nicely put about a fathers love for his daughter. I have two sons so mine would be different,but my love the same nice job.

    KristyLoren commented on This Daughter of Ours

    08-31-2009

    Beautiful lyrics and love here. Some parts not to smooth, but a very well expressed piece of art. Overall I enjoyed it alot. Good job.

    WinterFrost commented on This Daughter of Ours

    08-31-2009

    love it! nice

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