To Deceitful Eyes

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revised edition of a poem not even i am sure the meaning of

To Deceitful Eyes

to deceitful eyes
i stand petrified
on fire for the fuel i seek
i grant them nothing

not even a peek
just the tip of my entrenching tool  
without a trace
i vanish like a jewel down your neck

before every saving grace
to whom it concerns
i assure you my face
wriggles with laughter

at your ineffectual squirms
to my deceitful eyes
you fall into my cozy cage
and i descend with a lover's rage

to their deceitful eyes
i cry protectively
shadowing your body
with my own failing frame

i stagger to the entrance and struggle
assailed by deviants
muscles screaming as they tear you from me
and carry you away

our love so pervasive i smell you to this day
my aged, weary eyelids
straining to view another sunrise
lowered to the ground as if on a string

i fiddle with a scuffed silver ring
that i never took off
that i never betrayed
after your death, even then i stayed

i have killed
many in your name
righteous and sinful
all fell to my hollow blade

my rising anger
warring with my drowning shame
to their deceitful eyes
a whippoorwill's song sounds like a lullabye

someday soon
ill know for sure
if all the words I spoke
might be the cure

a phoenix's winged
effortless flight
might take me from my plight
and leave me broken

on a beach in May
and eternally stoned
burning, burning, nothing left
but consuming flame

to your deceitful eyes
your wishful acceptance of blame
that i take into myself
feel it sit like a sponge

if ever i forget
let me know in time
so that i might be honest in the end
and see the truth that you hide

i come from simpler times
i am the sum of lesser evils
i pray that i might recognize
the nature of the path

the bias of the witness
for in your dark eyes i see my redemption
as casual as it seems
no exemption

goodbye window of morning sunlight
in the shadows i lie
and molder upright
welcome to the catacomb of my eternal night

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SuperChick76 commented on To Deceitful Eyes

06-01-2010

A Very interesting read, indeed. Such pain expressed beautifully within internal torture and self-loathing that can only be expressed the in hate(?) death(?) of ithers. Beautifully expressed. The word usage was brilliant. THanks for sharing this with us, man.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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