• Love

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    "It doesn't happen all at once," said the Skin Horse. "You become. It takes a long time. That's why it doesn't happen often to people who break easily, or have sharp edges, or who have to be carefully kept. Generally, by the time you are Real, most of your hair has been loved off, and your eyes drop out and you get loose in the joints and very shabby. But these things don't matter at all, because once you are Real you can't be ugly, except to people who don't understand."


    by Marjorie Williams


    is it the poisoned nectar
    pouring out like acid rain
    etching on your lonely heart
    the sweet fluidity of my pain

    like a bee collecting pollen
    on a drowsy summer day
    would you make me honey
    and then just fly away

    or do you flit across a garden
    of a thousand broken hearts
    to taste their tear-dust pollen
    and yet hold yourself apart

    lush swollen petals longing
    for the love you've dangled there
    but so many tempting flowers
    fill this garden of despair

    no sweet morning glory
    nor vibrant hot-house bloom
    no exotic centerpiece
    or intoxicant perfume

    not a gently trailing vine
    slowly seeking to entwine
    not a rose so perfect formed
    to pierce your heart with wicked thorn

    but petals softly floating down
    to settle gently on the ground
    reveal a pulsing more profound
    the truth of me at last unbound

    not fragile or just ornamental
    I'm something real and elemental
    the petals from my branches flow
    that in their place the peach can grow

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    shallenemcgrath commented on unbound


    Yes Yes yes yes yes.....................................................A perfect ending to a perfect poem.



    thank you shallene - I'm honored you enjoyed :)

    connsk8 commented on unbound


    Your words are just aged to perfection, it's like with every work you do, you only manage to outdo the one before, I love the comparison to flowers, how fragile you are, the beauty yet how you perservere..

    Qualin commented on unbound


    this rating ws from another poem this ione is great and deserves a 10..don't know how I rated this one ...but Im new at this I give you a 10,poision

    Qualin commented on unbound


    deep and alive....spoken and true....tortue to yourself of things are they true...just a mirrow of reflections...that drift like hardened wood... keep you always wondering....am I misunderstood.....Shake Qualin...(no spear)

    Artie commented on unbound


    You just created something magical, and timeless. A definate 10 from me .............................

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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